Forever and a Day
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- Ven
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Forever and a Day
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Forever and a Day
A poet and philosopher of note
who analyzed the total of his work
concluded that the sum of what he wrote
was lacking any literary worth.
Unhappy at its insignificance
he's since devised a keen and cunning plan
he's trained himself to write whilst in a trance
by taking lessons from that Derren Brown.
To date he's written twelve vivid epics
and some intriging pages of free verse
his hand scribbles, automatic, frantic !
Like magic dancing shoes it's now a curse.
He loathes the writings of his inner self
and mourns the secret thoughts he gives away
but his art graces many a book-shelf
and his name lives forever and a day.
©Ven.Dec06
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Forever and a Day
A poet and philosopher of note
who analyzed the total of his work
concluded that the sum of what he wrote
was lacking any literary worth.
Unhappy at its insignificance
he's since devised a keen and cunning plan
he's trained himself to write whilst in a trance
by taking lessons from that Derren Brown.
To date he's written twelve vivid epics
and some intriging pages of free verse
his hand scribbles, automatic, frantic !
Like magic dancing shoes it's now a curse.
He loathes the writings of his inner self
and mourns the secret thoughts he gives away
but his art graces many a book-shelf
and his name lives forever and a day.
©Ven.Dec06
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"Forever is short thought when your skipping this close to the edge".
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"Forever is short thought when your skipping this close to the edge".
Ven's MYSPACE
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- Ven
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Derren Brown is definitely not a psychic He's an entertainer, a hypnotist and an exceptionally clever psychologist. He has gained obscene amounts of money and UK wide fame from the making of three entertaining television series about how easy it is to manipulate the human mind. The episode where he set up a fake seance in order to prove how easy it is to scam the bereaved was the most complained about programme on British TV ... EVER !!! apparently he still receives several letters of complaint every week form psychics and Christians, he is sensitive to all onjections but believes that at least the latter will forgive him.
He's a superb entertainer and a slightly scarey but very clever man.
As for that lack of an identity for the poet in the piece, that was deliberate
Thanks for reading and commenting Gillian, as always it is greatly appreciated
He's a superb entertainer and a slightly scarey but very clever man.
As for that lack of an identity for the poet in the piece, that was deliberate
Thanks for reading and commenting Gillian, as always it is greatly appreciated
Last edited by Ven on Sat Dec 16, 2006 1:10 pm, edited 1 time in total.
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"Forever is short thought when your skipping this close to the edge".
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"Forever is short thought when your skipping this close to the edge".
Ven's MYSPACE
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Google this number; 1905363966
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Thanks Naomi, slighly sad was the intention thank you
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"Forever is short thought when your skipping this close to the edge".
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"Forever is short thought when your skipping this close to the edge".
Ven's MYSPACE
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Google this number; 1905363966
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Love the flow, Ven.
Entering the sanctuary of my mind may lead to perils of unknown magnitude.......... hold on and embrace the ride. Feel the tolls as we pass from existance into my sought domain of twisted reality. -negatv: 5/05-
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If I changed anything I have done in my life I wouldn't be me. Personally, I kinda like me. I'm an asshole, but I'm my kind of asshole.
Friends are what help me guide myself through life. I just have to find the right direction first. -negatv- 10/06
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Thanks Neg, I worked hard on that flow ... 160 syllables that is. Go on count 'em
Gilly ..... Nah
Gilly ..... Nah
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"Forever is short thought when your skipping this close to the edge".
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"Forever is short thought when your skipping this close to the edge".
Ven's MYSPACE
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Google this number; 1905363966
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I'll e damned. It is 160 syllables. Rock on Mrs. V
Entering the sanctuary of my mind may lead to perils of unknown magnitude.......... hold on and embrace the ride. Feel the tolls as we pass from existance into my sought domain of twisted reality. -negatv: 5/05-
If I changed anything I have done in my life I wouldn't be me. Personally, I kinda like me. I'm an asshole, but I'm my kind of asshole.
Friends are what help me guide myself through life. I just have to find the right direction first. -negatv- 10/06
If I changed anything I have done in my life I wouldn't be me. Personally, I kinda like me. I'm an asshole, but I'm my kind of asshole.
Friends are what help me guide myself through life. I just have to find the right direction first. -negatv- 10/06
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"Forever is short thought when your skipping this close to the edge".
Ven's MYSPACE
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Google this number; 1905363966
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"Forever is short thought when your skipping this close to the edge".
Ven's MYSPACE
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A very intrigUing piece Ven, well written, that ten syllable thing is difficult, and it's very easy to lose that Iambic rythym.
Derren Brown rocks, the armed robbery in particular was very disturbing and just went to show how easily people can be manipulated, especially those that convince themselves that they are immune to such things.
Derren Brown rocks, the armed robbery in particular was very disturbing and just went to show how easily people can be manipulated, especially those that convince themselves that they are immune to such things.
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Thanks Pope, I realize that the rythym gets a bit choppy at the beginning of the third and end of the fourth stanzas. Not too worried about it though it still flows well enough I think and I haven't had to compromise on the theme ... which is nice
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"Forever is short thought when your skipping this close to the edge".
Ven's MYSPACE
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Google this number; 1905363966
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"Forever is short thought when your skipping this close to the edge".
Ven's MYSPACE
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Google this number; 1905363966
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An' it harm none, do what ye will. Blessed Be.
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Re: Forever and a Day
This is way too UK in it's references for a dumb Yankee like myself to pick up on,..... but if I was a Brit I bet I'd think it was amusing. Well done my friend.
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hello there dear ven....just a little stop in here tonight during a quiet time, hope that you are doing well
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