Runaway

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Post by Berlie » Fri Jan 24, 2003 6:09 pm

Runaway

street signs flicker past
city lights fall behind
peering out the darkened glass
my reflection looking back

the past I leave behind
the future lies ahead
not sure where this road will take me
not certain I should have fled

sighing I adjust the headphones
drowning out the noise with song
closing eyes to try to sleep
the greyhound bus rumbles on


February, 1999
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An old one of mine but I don't think I have ever posted it here. Just sharing!
Last edited by Berlie on Fri Aug 27, 2004 11:00 am, edited 1 time in total.

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Post by Ven » Fri Jan 24, 2003 6:23 pm

I like this one. I've been tempted to take that bus ride myself once or twice. Luckily things never seemed to look quite as bleak after a few tears and a good nights sleep.

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Post by running wolf » Fri Jan 24, 2003 6:40 pm

i have heard this story, in variations, from a few over the past year, it looks like you made the right choices, at least thats how it looks from here,....i can see this picture plainly, leaning in the seat, looking out the window till it is darker on the outside then on the inside, then the glass just gives back your reflection, headphones on, moving on into another day, another life.........

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Post by Moongem » Fri Jan 24, 2003 7:58 pm

Kimberlie, I think this is one of those pieces I've been told is the correct way to write poetry, giving the reader the few pertinent details that cohese the whole, and leaving room for the others imagination to soar and continue the flow. I can see the loveliness and grace of this form, but, in my mind, there are my "ridiculed" (NOT HERE) imagery packed pieces, that also have power. As an ignoramus of college or poetic literature, I don't see any harm in having infinite forms of writing. Basically what I am saying is, this piece rocks!! <img border="0" title="" alt="[Embarrassed]" src="redface.gif" /> <img border="0" title="" alt="[Big Grin]" src="biggrin.gif" />

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Post by Maryjane » Fri Jan 24, 2003 9:17 pm

A few weeks ago I went to California to visit a sick friend. We enjoyed our week there but when it came time to come back to Arkansas our ride to the airport failed to show! And we were to scared to take a taxi to LA!We had to get up at 3 in the morning because the person that was taking to the metro link had to be at work at 4! The metro link doesn't run until 6:45am! I felt like a runaway waiting out there in the cold for that train to pul up! We had all our lugagae. It was awful! So we took the metro link to the red line to the blue line to green line! Then we got on the shuttle bus to ride to the airport! Never ever again!

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Post by Berlie » Mon Nov 13, 2006 5:44 pm

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Post by shawn2005 » Mon Nov 13, 2006 5:59 pm

good stuff.

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Post by heinzs » Wed Oct 10, 2007 9:31 pm

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