No One At All

[The Ravyn]

Wandering up the coast highway
filled with despair and regret
asking myself why I go on
An old Russian fort looms ahead
and I make a small side trip
out to the edge of the cliff
overlooking the sea
I stand looking out over the water
tears rolling down my cheeks
exhaustion consuming my mind
making it hard for me to think of
a reason to continue on
I stare straight down
to the rocks and sand below
and I wonder how it would feel
If I would feel anything at all
If it would be quick
If I would lie down there in agony
for an unknown time before
the sweet blackness takes me
I decide that I don't care
the burden of life is too much
for a seventeen year old girl
homeless and wretched
I step a little closer to the brink
steeling myself for the plunge
close my eyes and just as I start to take that last step
A woman's voice speaks from behind
'It's a wonderful view isn't it?
Kind of makes you glad to be alive.'
Opening my eyes, I turn to see
who is there talking to me
wasting my time when I could be
dead and gone already
and I see standing there
on the headland with me
no one at all
I stand there as the sun sets
and, yes it really is a wonderful view
As the darkness creeps in from the east
I turn away from the precipice
and walk on up the highway

[Aschmutt]

i've been there ravyn, trust me, one time too many. the voice you heard....it kind of makes you wonder. this was pretty eerie, and i'm glad you heard that voice. i thought this was a neat poem....that voice kinda gave me the chills....well done [img]images/smiles/icon_smile.gif[/img]

[ehli'schild]

another really good one... funny what we don't hear when we're alone sometimes huh? sometimes ourselves, sometimes god, and sometimes....???

[Berlie]

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[midnight_kitty_kat]

Woa very very very nicely done ravyn, that is awesome! I just leaves me speechless, 4 real <img border="0" title="" alt="[Eek!]" src="eek.gif" />

[Aschmutt]

i remember this poem, and it is still as beautifully written as it was the first time i read it. this is one of my favorites, jenn. <img border="0" title="" alt="[Smile]" src="smile.gif" />

[The Ravyn]

my thanks to all of you who read and replied ... i don't know if you would be interested ... (and this is really kinda tacky!) but i wrote a follow-up to this poem ... about visiting this same cliff some 8 years later ... it's called 'cliff of destiney: revisited' thanks again ... and berlie ... a special thanks for bumping this!

[third libra]

Very nice poem, Ravyn. Thanks for having written it. If it wasn't for Berlie, I would have missed this write. Nicely done.

[thief of dreams]

ok people, this poem is being voted into the Community Favorites forum.. we need five nominations to get it entered so come on people.. read it one more time and if you find it fitting then dont be shy and submit your vote for it here
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[Berlie]

Is now listed as a Community Favorite. <img border="0" alt="[BeerChug]" title="" src="graemlins/beerchug.gif" />