Smoke Scream

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Post by The Ravyn » Sun Aug 04, 2002 2:13 am

Smoke swirls around me like a mist
invading the very core of my being
conjuring visions of a yesterday
that is best left forgotten, buried
Nightmare images of trolls and orcs
run through my mind, rampant, amok
tearing at the thin fabric of reality
and showing me the lunacy that lies beyond
I rise to my feet, too quickly, cough
grab the table for support, shaking
Then I take my daughter's hand and flee
out into the night, a scream half suppressed
forcing its way past my vocal chords
burning my throat raw with its power
and finally bursting out from between my lips
:silence:

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Post by heinzs » Sun Aug 04, 2002 4:15 pm

This sounds like a terribly frightening dream... though I am fully aware that it is based in your own unique reality. The fear really comes through in this. Excellent!

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Post by The Ravyn » Sun Aug 04, 2002 4:49 pm

most people who have experienced flashbacks know that they are much like nightmares ... only much much more real ... and losing yourself inside of one can be ... more like reality than reality itself

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Post by heinzs » Sun Feb 15, 2004 11:10 am

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Post by JukotoxKanashimi » Sun Feb 15, 2004 9:19 pm

silence is a beatuiful sound yet it can break any living soul it touches. The human pysche is a fragile thing. This poem was fluid-like in its meaning but i managed to grasp it. Great poem Ravyn I enjoyed the read

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Post by The Ravyn » Sun Feb 15, 2004 9:23 pm

thanks juko! (and thank you heinz ... as always ... for the bump! *s*)

this happened in a restaurant that lisa and i used to go to sometimes ... it has a lot to do with the smell of cigars and their ... effect on me
take my hand if you don't know where you're goin' ... i'll understand .... i've lost the way myself ...
j. kaye

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Post by heinzs » Sun Feb 15, 2004 9:28 pm

After that comment I think I need to find "White Owl" and resurrect it from the archives.

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Post by thief of dreams » Sun Sep 12, 2004 4:11 pm

:mrgreen:
"Thoughts are the shadows of our feelings - always darker, emptier and simpler."
Friedrich Nietzsche

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Post by thief of dreams » Fri Feb 11, 2005 1:04 am

:bump:
"Thoughts are the shadows of our feelings - always darker, emptier and simpler."
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Post by thief of dreams » Sat Oct 15, 2005 2:34 pm

:cool:
"Thoughts are the shadows of our feelings - always darker, emptier and simpler."
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