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Post by Black Wolf's Blood » Thu Aug 31, 2006 3:12 pm

Daddy...
my daddy...

The touch so cruel.

Daddy...
my daddy...

The hands that bruise.

I lost my voice at school today.

My throat tearing and raw from my screams.

I love my daddy.

The glaring eyes hold only hate.

I love my mommy, too.

I call out to her, but she doesnt seem to hear.

My mommy would never let anyone hurt me.

She watches as his hand lands upon my pale, child's flesh.

My daddy kisses me goodnight.

The brutal kiss bruises my mouth and makes my lips split and bleed.

My daddy holds me in bed sometimes when I cant sleep.

The fierce thrusts tearing and splitting untried boy's flesh.

My daddy sometimes punishes me when I'm bad.

Lips and the corner of my mouth splits as he shoves the hard thing of flesh into my mouth over and over again.

It hurts, it hurts.

Blood oozes from the cruelly stretched, torn, and brutally used hole.

I love my daddy.

The hand that lands on pale flesh.

My daddy loves me too.

The yells get louder,
the hands get crueller.


He would never hurt me.

The gun he puts to my head...
The click as he cocks it...
and then...

BANG!!






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Post by Black Wolf's Blood » Thu Aug 31, 2006 3:13 pm

people say u can only write about what you've esperienced. i love u all. i hope u like this one. it was hard to put it into words.
In his embrace you found yourself. In his kiss you were born. In his words you learned. In his heart you loved. In his absense you hurt.

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Post by heinzs » Thu Aug 31, 2006 3:31 pm

Wolf, I moved this to the Ravyn's nest because of the content. It deals with abuse of monumental nature and is too "strong" even for the "Dark Side" forum. If you've read the Ravyn's story you'll understand.

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Post by jeannerené » Thu Aug 31, 2006 7:47 pm

Danyale,

This did need to be moved to this forum ... as Heinz has said it involves abuse of montumental nature ........

Please browse Ravyn's Forum's .... for advise, help, hotlines and comfort ....

.....Danyale ... don't be alone with this knowledge .... if you need help ...please... get it!


..jeanne
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expelled and onward through desert dust swallowed,
sands he says that gorge on simple sensibilities.
And, now he spits fragments, grit, extended vowels and elongated syllables
over cracked lips. Their sounds fall
piling round his boots…
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Post by Black Wolf's Blood » Fri Sep 01, 2006 2:07 pm

k. thanx guys
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Post by thief of dreams » Fri Sep 01, 2006 2:12 pm

and if ya just need someone to spit at or scream to, there is plenty on here, myself included who wouldnt mind listening...
is ultimately up to you's though...
just dont be alone with it you crazy female woman you... i know, im slacking on the pet names today... sorry.. lol :hello:

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Post by Black Wolf's Blood » Sat Sep 16, 2006 7:21 pm

thanx thief. i kno u and others r there for me, but i just dont like to bitch to people
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Post by thief of dreams » Sun Sep 17, 2006 11:06 am

so dont think of it as bitching, think of it as venting.. we love it when people vent cause then they feel better afterwards...

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Post by Black Wolf's Blood » Fri Sep 22, 2006 1:47 pm

lol. i kno. i just dont like to cuz i kno i dont have it bad, and to vent would be bitching to my frendz that have it worse. of, and i wanted to thank u ,thief, and everyone, for wat u've done for me. thanx bunches
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Post by Debbie » Wed Sep 27, 2006 5:08 am

Black Wolf's Blood..this tore my heart out in a sense of the word.....what a tale of pain and sorrow......I don't know what to say except I love you dear heart...here if you need someone... :darn:
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Post by Black Wolf's Blood » Thu Oct 05, 2006 11:41 am

thanx deddie. i really really thank u for wat u said. it gave me SOME good feelings. :mrgreen:
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Post by Black Wolf's Blood » Wed Sep 05, 2007 1:56 pm

i wanna change the ending
My daddy loves me...
And I love him.
but i have a problem; change it to wat?!
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Post by moonflower » Wed Sep 05, 2007 7:29 pm

i had tears in my eyes when i finished reading this! :crying: ..so devastating and sad!..my heart goes out to you..*hugs*..


my thoughts about the ending were to maybe just simply say..

"now im dead".. its just a suggestion..

this poem really touches the reader and allows them to feel the pain and the horror of the situation..i think you are a wonderfully gifted writer..please keep on writing out the pain and the hurt..its therapudic..

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Post by heinzs » Wed Sep 05, 2007 9:38 pm

How about just "the end"?
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Post by Black Wolf's Blood » Fri Sep 07, 2007 2:59 pm

<grin> thank u moonflower and heinzs for ur sugestions, and another thank u to u, moonflower, for ur tears. not that i dont appretiate the suggestions, but i was thinking of something a bit more complicated than 'the end' or 'now im dead'. the poem itself is, in my opinion, not simple enough for an ending like that. im sorry! <panicing> please dont take offence (cant spell) to that! its not that im not thankful, but more of i just dont think it fits.
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