Desecrated Angel

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Post by The Ravyn » Sat Mar 08, 2003 1:18 pm

drip
                                         falling
                       wilted
      flower
                                   bends
              breaks
                                                      tears
drip
                                         immoral
                      abomination
      desecrated
                                  angel
             clipped
                           wings
                                                      tears
drip
                                        tarnished
                      silver
      molten
                                  brass
            unclean
                          damned
                                                     wilted
                                 flower
                   tears
drip


03/07/2003


Author's Note: scattered like my thoughts ... confused ... like my emotions ... if there was a way of visualizing the pain ... i would have done that as well ... *sad smile*

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Post by Moongem » Sat Mar 08, 2003 2:01 pm

<img border="0" alt="[Crying]" title="" src="graemlins/cry.gif" /> Terribly sad and aching, Jenn... Beautiful Bird, forgive yourself. So many people care for you, yearn for your peace, ache with your wounds, pray for your spirit. I love you, Jenn. <img border="0" alt="[Valentine]" title="" src="graemlins/valentine.gif" /> <img border="0" title="" alt="[Smile]" src="smile.gif" />

<img border="0" alt="[Smack]" title="" src="graemlins/smack.gif" /> This one is for your stepdad. <img border="0" alt="[Smack]" title="" src="graemlins/smack.gif" /> This one is for the asshole cop. <img border="0" alt="[Smack]" title="" src="graemlins/smack.gif" /> <img border="0" alt="[Smack]" title="" src="graemlins/smack.gif" /> These are for all the other assholes who hurt you. <img border="0" alt="[Devil]" title="" src="graemlins/devilani.gif" /> To the devil with them!!!!

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Post by heinzs » Sat Mar 08, 2003 2:47 pm

What Erin said.

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Post by ehli'schild » Wed Mar 12, 2003 12:47 am

hey, ravyn,

i really like the visual effect, and the words you put into it made the entire meaning "more-so," i'm not sure how else to say it. and you know, erin is right. you, like me, sometimes post old stuff, but yeah, you've gone one with your life and you're not a victim anymore. still, your experiences make your poems all that much more real. <img border="0" alt="[SeeNoEvil]" title="" src="graemlins/seenoevil.gif" />

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Post by The Ravyn » Wed Mar 12, 2003 7:24 am

*s* ty all! *hugz* for moonie and ehli's .. ok heinzs too *hugz*

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Post by Alisdaire » Wed Mar 12, 2003 12:12 pm

I loved it...It caught my attention and although haunting, I was engaged in the pattern of words ---grand poem------------Alisdaire

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Post by Blaze » Wed Mar 12, 2003 1:16 pm

It's amazing what poems can say and do... even just scattered thoughts. It makes you think, life is a poem. Sometimes it's just scattered thoughts, sometimes it has perfect ryhme, sometimes it's free verse when you just don't know how to explain it in rhyme, and other times it's kind of a struggle, like when you just can't think of the perfect word that rhymes. I could go on and on... but I won't <img border="0" title="" alt="[Smile]" src="smile.gif" /> I might start into a "lecture" of some sort... haha.

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Post by Aschmutt » Thu Mar 13, 2003 9:21 pm

wow....amazing choice of words and so cleverly put together. i feel your heartache and pain. keep on writing, though, as writing soothes the soul and strengthens the mind. <img border="0" title="" alt="[Smile]" src="smile.gif" />

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