**Wings** Poem of the Week: Feb 1, 2004

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**Wings** Poem of the Week: Feb 1, 2004

Post by The Ravyn » Wed Jan 28, 2004 6:57 pm

Winner: Poem of the Week: February 1, 2004
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walking through the endless clouds
snow laden, dreary grey
i chanced to meet a wingless angel
measuring the day

she turned and, smiling, asked me
why i wandered in the gloom
when all around was sunshine warm
and daffodils in bloom

this is where i do belong
where i've always seemed to stay
dark and cold have ever been
my escort, night and day

she took my hand, i followed to
the far edge of the sky
pointing out she said to me
just spread your wings and fly

but i have no wings with which to fly
and fear that i will fall
and who is there to catch me?
i see no one there at all

watch, she said, and learn a lesson
many never find
the wings you need to bear you up
are found within your mind

she turned and spread her arms apart
leaned out towards the land
hovered there on naught but air
and beckoned for my hand

just as i touched her fingertips
the dream melted away
but i still have within my mind
the wings i found that day


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Nominated for Poem of the Week 1/29/2004
Last edited by The Ravyn on Thu Jan 29, 2004 5:45 am, edited 1 time in total.
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Post by bags123 » Thu Jan 29, 2004 5:19 am

Ravyn,
This was absolutley stunning! A rare poetic insight into a beautiful soul.
Just Perfect! :cheers:
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Post by thief of dreams » Thu Jan 29, 2004 5:33 am

i second that.. a true gift to read... thank you...
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Post by Tom Watson » Thu Jan 29, 2004 5:43 am

Beautiful! A wonderful flight into the nature of faith, and a lesson of life for everyone to hold close.

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Post by Jaysie » Thu Jan 29, 2004 6:20 am

Belief is a hard thing to find... hold onto it! This was a lovely read! :mrgreen:

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Post by gordy » Thu Jan 29, 2004 7:43 am

a really awesome job!!! i like the way it flows along and the positive message. keep up the good work. :wink:
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Post by Mystified » Thu Jan 29, 2004 7:47 am

amazing write.. :bow:

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Post by Catchalook » Thu Jan 29, 2004 8:57 am

Loved it Ravyn, I got totally into it. It was a beginning to end and read it over and over poem. :)
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Post by brezz » Thu Jan 29, 2004 9:07 am

this is fantastic from beginning to end. great writing.
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Post by Gillian » Thu Jan 29, 2004 4:19 pm

I third, fourth and fifth that. Beautiful.

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Post by ChaotiKana » Thu Jan 29, 2004 5:05 pm

a very beautiful piece of work raven this by far superbly brings out your talent i love this poem

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Post by The Ravyn » Thu Jan 29, 2004 6:20 pm

wow! thank you all! i never really expected anyone to like this ... i just kinda threw it together and wasn't all that happy with it but ... *s* thanks tom for putting me in the 'competition' and bags for giving me a vote there too ...

btw darth bagger ... love the new avatar! hehehehehe
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Post by Dragonchild » Fri Jan 30, 2004 7:44 am

:bow: wow *applauds*

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Post by preston » Fri Jan 30, 2004 12:41 pm

another wow !
this is a beautiful poem Ravyn
definitely one of your best

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Post by brezz » Fri Jan 30, 2004 12:52 pm

This is really good...and the rhyme flows excellent without seeming forced...fabulous job...great poem!
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