At the End of the Day

The Ravyn · Post by **The Ravyn** » Sat Aug 02, 2003 9:50 pm

diaphanous wisps trail
like a vaprous bridal veil
atop billowing towers
glowing orange
as the sun points
fading fingers
and out of the corner of my eye
flashes burst white hot
amidst the black shroud above
seventy-one crows
fly out of the south-east
yes i counted every one
fluttering black speckles
upon the pinkening backdrop
and the cottonball tower
becomes a glowing ember
alight from within
edges all aglow, blushing
like a virgin bride
veil trailing detached
breaks apart and drifts
as another glaring white flash
bursts within the wall
of blackness to the south
the breeze lifts my hair
caresses my cheek
before passing on
following the crows perhaps
as the ember fades out
alit no more
so i say good bye
to another day

kuperian4ever · Post by **kuperian4ever** » Sat Aug 02, 2003 10:41 pm

Pssst..sounds like you were smokin a J..

But that being said, I enjoyed the read, wonderful work from a well established writer.

The visuals of a darkening sky behind a gothic setting, a young lady, a wisp of lace, face turned to the breeze, pondering the remains of the day as the coming darkness brings the tower lights ablaze. While on the quickening breeze fly the crows into the gathering night..

Quite beautiful, enticing, dreamy..

ehli'schild · Post by **ehli'schild** » Sat Aug 02, 2003 10:46 pm

hey, ravynn, that was so descriptive, so elegant. loved it. you totally gave end-of-day's the treatment they deserve. <img border="0" alt="[ThumbsUp]" title="" src="graemlins/thumbsup.gif" /> <img border="0" alt="[BowDown]" title="" src="graemlins/notworthy.gif" />

The Ravyn · Post by **The Ravyn** » Sat Aug 02, 2003 10:52 pm

thanks! aren't sunsets great?!?!? s.p. ... i gave up smoking j's years ago ... ;o) but that doesn't mean i don't remember ... hehehehehe

kuperian4ever · Post by **kuperian4ever** » Sat Aug 02, 2003 11:25 pm

I smoked it but never inhaled..Bill Clinton...

Being in the US Navy for 20 years changed that little habit for me. Gone for good but as the late/great Bob Hope always said, Thanks for the memories..

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The Ravyn · Post by **The Ravyn** » Sun Aug 03, 2003 12:14 am

or as i always tell lisa ... thanks for the mammaries ... ;o) ummm maybe i shouldn't say that here ...

Lil Gray · Post by **Lil Gray** » Mon Aug 04, 2003 8:40 pm

<img border="0" alt="[BowDown]" title="" src="graemlins/notworthy.gif" /> Excellent!!

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