experimental form
Dawn to dusk.
The eastern sky
Suffused with light.
New risen sun is climbing high.
Erasing shadows of the night.
From east to west.
The normal way.
The sun pursues his daily quest.
In the same way every day
As he has done
Since time began.
Our days are measured by the sun.
Whose rule applies to every man.
When morning breaks.
The sun will rise
And take the route he always takes
From east to west across the sky.
At journeys end.
The sun will set.
And shadows of the night descend.
An all embracing coverlet.
Sunday, 11 November 2012
Dawn to dusk.
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Re: Dawn to dusk.
It flows very well alternating two iambic dimetric lines with two tetrametric ones, especially with the alternating rhyme scheme. I think it's an experiment successfully accomplished.
An' it harm none, do what ye will. Blessed Be.
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Re: Dawn to dusk.
I like this a lot. The form is cool. The thought wise. The sound -- easy. --FF
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