Dawn to dusk.

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poeticpiers reborn
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Dawn to dusk.

Post by poeticpiers reborn » Sun Nov 11, 2012 5:35 am

experimental form

Dawn to dusk.

The eastern sky
Suffused with light.
New risen sun is climbing high.
Erasing shadows of the night.

From east to west.
The normal way.
The sun pursues his daily quest.
In the same way every day

As he has done
Since time began.
Our days are measured by the sun.
Whose rule applies to every man.

When morning breaks.
The sun will rise
And take the route he always takes
From east to west across the sky.

At journeys end.
The sun will set.
And shadows of the night descend.
An all embracing coverlet.

Sunday, 11 November 2012

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Re: Dawn to dusk.

Post by heinzs » Sun Nov 11, 2012 10:56 am

It flows very well alternating two iambic dimetric lines with two tetrametric ones, especially with the alternating rhyme scheme. I think it's an experiment successfully accomplished.

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Re: Dawn to dusk.

Post by FirestoneFeinberg » Sun Nov 25, 2012 9:15 am

I like this a lot. The form is cool. The thought wise. The sound -- easy. --FF
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