Well adapted to the task.
A predator who hunts by night.
Quarters the sky on silent wings.
The owl with night adapted eyes
Is well equipped for night hunting.
Quarters the sky on silent wings.
In search of unsuspecting prey
Is well equipped for night hunting
Owls rarely venture out by day.
In search for unsuspecting prey
To satisfy their appetite.
Owls rarely venture out by day.
They much prefer the dim twilight.
To satisfy their appetite.
This predator who hunts by night.
They much prefer the dim twilight.
The owls with night adapted sight.
Saturday, 27 October 2012
Well adapted to the task. Pantoum.
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Re: Well adapted to the task. Pantoum.
The Pantoum has fallen out of favor lately... most, I suspect, are afraid to venture into its complexities.
The only line I have a problem with in this one is "Quarters the sky on silent wings". I understand and feel why you used it, but it is awkward in its return where it must stand alone. Just an observation, nothing more.
Cheers!
The only line I have a problem with in this one is "Quarters the sky on silent wings". I understand and feel why you used it, but it is awkward in its return where it must stand alone. Just an observation, nothing more.
Cheers!
An' it harm none, do what ye will. Blessed Be.
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Re: Well adapted to the task. Pantoum.
Hi Heinz I agree but could not find a better way.
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