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bags123
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Car Sonnet

Post by bags123 » Tue Nov 03, 2009 1:45 pm

Car Sonnet


If patience be a virtue I'll be damned
By all the time I've spent in my pursuit
Of never knowing where I really am
Despite the hours I spend when I commute

Lost minutes burn away before I'm there
Secluded in my silver, Ford, sedan.
Upholstered in my speeding, leather, chair
Just like the ones imported from Japan.

Forbearance with a world that's gone awry
May seem the only answer now, and then
But thinking so, soon makes a man deny
Those feelings that he's prone to feel again

Impatient with the way things always are
While sitting still,.. in traffic,... in my car.

I prefer to keep an open mind,....but not so much that my brains fall out.- Carl Sagan
Your brain is like an umbrella. It only works when it's open- Someone Smart


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Re: Car Sonnet

Post by wblogan » Tue Nov 03, 2009 3:00 pm

It's a marvelous feeling, perched so close to creeping pavement.
your butt inches from the street and yet a sonnet in you,
determined to be heard.
Why not? :grin:

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Re: Car Sonnet

Post by bags123 » Tue Nov 03, 2009 5:59 pm

Thanks Mr. Logan. Slainte :cheers:
I prefer to keep an open mind,....but not so much that my brains fall out.- Carl Sagan
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Re: Car Sonnet

Post by wblogan » Tue Nov 03, 2009 6:36 pm

And to you and yours, sir.
Nothing against my Irish brothers,
but mine are of the " ridge of tears" :crying:
and clan MacClelland. Picts, poets, and pig headed fools.

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Re: Car Sonnet

Post by bags123 » Tue Nov 03, 2009 6:59 pm

wblogan wrote:And to you and yours, sir.
Nothing against my Irish brothers,
but mine are of the " ridge of tears" :crying:
and clan MacClelland. Picts, poets, and pig headed fools.
A fine clan, with a good family history. Image
I prefer to keep an open mind,....but not so much that my brains fall out.- Carl Sagan
Your brain is like an umbrella. It only works when it's open- Someone Smart


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Re: Car Sonnet

Post by gordy » Wed Nov 04, 2009 2:52 am

i hate traffic! great poem though.... :thumbsup:
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My Jesus hung out with thieves and sluts and liars, which Jesus do you worship?

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Perfection is my enemy
Procrastination is his cohort
Persistence is my sword

---Gordy

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Re: Car Sonnet

Post by poeticpiers » Mon Jan 11, 2010 3:16 am

Traffic jams present an opportunity to compose fine verse much better than swearing uselessly
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Re: Car Sonnet

Post by bags123 » Mon Jan 11, 2010 4:05 am

Thanks for the read and comments Gordy and Ivor. :thewave:
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Re: Car Sonnet

Post by ailill » Wed Mar 03, 2010 5:05 pm

I like the flow, and rhyme in this....

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