Orchid (A Cinquain)

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Shane
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Orchid (A Cinquain)

Post by Shane » Wed Jun 15, 2005 2:16 am

Orchid
Gentle, Unique
Growing wild, ever free
To entrance and beguile my soul
Flower




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Post by Friend_forever » Wed Jun 15, 2005 4:19 am

nice :mrgreen:
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Post by Debbie » Wed Jun 15, 2005 7:03 am

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Post by Shane » Wed Jun 15, 2005 9:56 pm

Thanks FF & Debbie :D



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Post by Gillian » Tue Jun 21, 2005 3:20 am

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Richard taylor

Post by Richard taylor » Tue Jun 21, 2005 10:33 am

shane this is not a cinquain, i'll come back to it
very good though.
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Richard taylor

Post by Richard taylor » Tue Jun 21, 2005 10:49 am

hi shane just out a little, good try and i liked the imagery
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Objective - to write a cinquin poem

Poems that follow the syllable pattern. Line 1: 2sylables

Line 2 - 4, Line 3 - 6, Line 4 - 8, Line 5 - 2



Orchid 2) syllables correct
Gentle and Unique 6)should be four
They grow wild and free 5) should be 6
and entrance and beguil my soul 8) correc
Flower 2) correct

Advice take out the and’s for starters
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Post by heinzs » Tue Jun 21, 2005 12:49 pm

Suggestion:

<center>Orchid
Gentle, Unique
Growing wild, ever free
To entrance and beguile my soul
Flower
</center>

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Post by Shane » Wed Jun 22, 2005 1:21 am

Thanks people :mrgreen:

I'll try counting the syllables next time, shall I? :oops:




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Post by Cass » Sat Aug 06, 2005 11:32 am

Very nice, I attempted one of these a long time ago. Should try one again.
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Post by Shane » Sat Aug 06, 2005 7:16 pm

Thanks Cass :mrgreen:


I'm sure you can count syllables better than I :oops:



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