Goodbye, My Dear Undying (acrostic)

GoddessErika · Post by **GoddessErika** » Mon Jan 03, 2005 2:15 am

Moments lost
Instantly
So unjustly your departure
So sudden your absence
I feel abandoned
Numbed from endless days of
Grieving for you

Your words echo
Over and over in my mind
"Undying" you said, then

Solemnly I toss the flowers
One by one upon your hallowed grave

Ven · Post by **Ven** » Mon Jan 03, 2005 5:14 am

This is good ! Very poigniant. If I were to offer a suggestion it would be to change the title so as not to give away the acrostic message before hand. Maybe call it "Departure" or "Abandoned" ... What do you think ?

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GoddessErika · Post by **GoddessErika** » Mon Jan 03, 2005 5:21 am

Good idea Ven! Actually the only reason I gave it that as a title, was because I thought that was part of the "rule." Oops! Can you tell I've never wrtten one of these?

I'm going to go back and fix the title now... Thanks for the suggestion!

Ven · Post by **Ven** » Mon Jan 10, 2005 11:48 am

Your welcome ... a lot of people use the acrostic line as the title, I don't think there are any hard and fast rules about it. It seems to me that it's purely down to ones personal preference. I just think it gives that little something extra if the title is different.

By the way, I like the title you've chosen.

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