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cinquain #1

Post by jeannerené » Fri Oct 22, 2004 9:07 pm

cinquain #1


red cliffs
navajo sun
search horizon's river
dancing to the edge I could fall
freely



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... and his words purge up and outward,
expelled and onward through desert dust swallowed,
sands he says that gorge on simple sensibilities.
And, now he spits fragments, grit, extended vowels and elongated syllables
over cracked lips. Their sounds fall
piling round his boots…
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Post by moonflower » Sat Oct 23, 2004 1:13 pm

i love cinquains!..your syllable pattern is right-on!..2-4-6-8-2..they are so fun to write, yes?.. :lol:
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Post by jeannerené » Tue Oct 26, 2004 5:56 pm

Thanks Val.....yes I like them....never knew what they were before....but I do now....wonderful information you've put together here Val.....Thanks for your hard work........

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... and his words purge up and outward,
expelled and onward through desert dust swallowed,
sands he says that gorge on simple sensibilities.
And, now he spits fragments, grit, extended vowels and elongated syllables
over cracked lips. Their sounds fall
piling round his boots…
~ jeannerené

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~breathe~


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Post by heinzs » Mon Aug 15, 2005 10:35 pm

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Post by Eternum 1 » Mon Aug 15, 2005 11:20 pm

I can feel the cliffs edge and the desert thermals calling me to soar.

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Post by Debbie » Tue Aug 16, 2005 4:53 am

beautiful :bow:
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Re: cinquain #1

Post by Eternum 1 » Wed Oct 10, 2007 1:29 am

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Re: cinquain #1

Post by bags123 » Sun Oct 14, 2007 12:11 pm

I like the poem very much,.... but I'm still sitting here waiting for a cinquian. The service is terrible,.... Do you think it would take longer if I asked them to make mine more towards the dry side next one ? I'm gonna ask them to cease and desist on the ice too. I probably only got a "bleeping" eye dropper full of tequila in this one. At this rate it's gonna take at least 3 to get buzzed,... and that's never good. :thewave: Nothing like a good cinquain I always say. :thumbsup:
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Re: cinquain #1

Post by Jim » Fri Feb 22, 2008 9:28 am

Hi Jeanne,

I would never get that close to the edge, I hate heights.
Always feel someone is going to push me over.

TC
Jim

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