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Inner Conflict (Sestina)

Post by negatvone » Sun Apr 11, 2004 2:51 pm

<center> Inner Conflict

Her passions fire burns so bright upon this weary night
Lustful meaning longing for life to complete the venture true
Daemonic templates of lost desire pound her inner soul
Wicked memories suppressed in shadows; reap their weary toll
A single step out of hiding; light so brightly shown
Inside of her; her innards struggle to win this very fight

Turmoil of the moment has intervened in to this fight
Her hearts desire to love again will strive to see the night
So brilliantly the battle commences with such brutality shown
In the end; the hoards of memories hold her thoughts true
The rapture of the struggle shall charge her soul a toll
Before it’s over; she might as well just damn this very soul

Resistance forms against the feelings that place rapture on her soul
She stands with closed fist; her intention now to fight
On this night; she will be the one for whom the bell will toll
She beckons forth to seek the craved desire of this night
With torch in hand her path has been sent from lies into the true
Such beauty and valence is in the works to be lucidly shown

Searching in desire for the powers of the heart hidden, not shown
Enlightenment of her whole reaps the fruit upon her soul
This turmoil sent into her whole will stand true
She yearns for him; still, the will for him is left to fight
His descendant call wraps her whole in a blanket of night
A decadence of lies soon will take upon her body’s toll

Relentless battle within seeps into the casqued of its toll
She wants him to see the want and anguish to be shown
Still these thoughts are subdued into the blackness of night
Thoughts that is nothing more than tattered pages of her soul
She can not escape. She swallows her pride in this fight
This masquerade of hope; in depth, can vacantly be seen true

She rises in oppression with her head held straight and true
Emptiness of thought and the systematic bridges of toll
Wear upon her person in the inner layers of fight
In the end; her resilience will be the light shown
He will not rape and desecrate her lonesome soul
She will seclude these emotions into the comfort of night

The suppression will seek the true of her wicked night
The struggle will present on the toll of her soul
She will hide the fight that was shown.

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Post by negatvone » Sun Apr 11, 2004 2:52 pm

This took about 3 hours to compose.(and alot of music) Please let me know what you think.

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Post by heinzs » Sun Apr 11, 2004 2:56 pm

Totally rad for a first sestina, negatvone!!! Tres cool!!!

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Post by negatvone » Sun Apr 11, 2004 3:06 pm

Heinz....... you are too nice.(maby not considering you rip and shread most of my words.) It really means something to have you comment on this. I exherted alot on this piece.

You are a light beckoning my wants for the shore.
Thanks for bieng a "light house" for me.
You will never fathom my grattitude.

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Post by Tom Watson » Sun Apr 11, 2004 3:20 pm

:book:
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Totally Grreat! Fantastic accomplishment Jim. Congratulations!

Is this your first Sestina? Magnificent effort my friend. Sestina's are a challenge, but once you break down the walls and finish one, they become holders of a true sense of accomplishment, and I think you did damn well on this.

:thumbsup: :thumbsup: :thumbsup:

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Post by negatvone » Sun Apr 11, 2004 3:22 pm

Thanx Tom. This is my first Sestina. I looked at the requirements for a while before I attempted this. This is an exercise I suggest all try.

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Post by heinzs » Thu Apr 20, 2006 6:47 pm

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Post by negatvone » Sat Dec 16, 2006 2:46 am

Thanks, Heinz. :mrgreen:
Entering the sanctuary of my mind may lead to perils of unknown magnitude.......... hold on and embrace the ride. Feel the tolls as we pass from existance into my sought domain of twisted reality. -negatv: 5/05-

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Post by 4rum » Sun Dec 17, 2006 12:57 am

Great write! Sometimes we get so caught up in writing to a form instead of in the form, that our poem is forced as we try to 'fit' it into the structure. You have done well in writing a true poem while using this form. Your work on this must be very rewarding now that it's turned out so well.

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Post by bags123 » Thu Dec 21, 2006 6:21 am

Sestina's are a difficult form to master. I've tried and mine suck. Your's on the other hand shows alot of promise. Good work JImbo. :thumbsup:
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Post by negatvone » Thu Dec 21, 2006 8:54 am

Thanks, 4rum and Gerry.

I wouldn't say anything sucks; just so long as you give it a try. If you never give it a try..... then you can't appreciate what it takes. :2cents:
Entering the sanctuary of my mind may lead to perils of unknown magnitude.......... hold on and embrace the ride. Feel the tolls as we pass from existance into my sought domain of twisted reality. -negatv: 5/05-

If I changed anything I have done in my life I wouldn't be me. Personally, I kinda like me. I'm an asshole, but I'm my kind of asshole.

Friends are what help me guide myself through life. I just have to find the right direction first. -negatv- 10/06

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Post by Squawk » Sat Dec 23, 2006 4:40 pm

I really like it. Well I like it a lot, as in it's great. Beautiful in parts.

But no chance would I try one of those, it'd kill me. I admire you for doing something like that. Kill, death, destroy. Me dead.
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Re: Inner Conflict (Sestina)

Post by negatvone » Sun Jan 25, 2015 8:02 am

Buddy this is one of my favorites. This takes dedication. You have to be completely in the moment to do this style of poetry.
Entering the sanctuary of my mind may lead to perils of unknown magnitude.......... hold on and embrace the ride. Feel the tolls as we pass from existance into my sought domain of twisted reality. -negatv: 5/05-

If I changed anything I have done in my life I wouldn't be me. Personally, I kinda like me. I'm an asshole, but I'm my kind of asshole.

Friends are what help me guide myself through life. I just have to find the right direction first. -negatv- 10/06

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