Is this okay?

[GoodRedRoad]

I am a beach.

And he ran over me with his waves,
gently at first,
and then

harder.

Well I was moved

on the surface

pushed around into
unprecedented patterns,
but accounted for
in all respects.

So I am the sand.

Holding tightly to the tide
with an immeasurable appreciation,

loving

the changes,
but completely aware that one day
his ocean
will leave me nothing,
but salt.

And maybe

a bit

indifferent.

I want to lay under him and watch the light bend in his stomach.
He wants me to be him, but my body's too heavy to change it.

[Sailor55]

Stunningly articulate allegory!!
The Red Road is indeed Good. - D

[DunkinDonutsGuy]

really really stunning work... the last line is very well written

[JGarrison]

absolutely goregeous peice... very striking

[GoodRedRoad]

thank you guys so much for the comments. I actually turned this one in as part of my final exam at school so I feel like I can rest a bit easier knowing it's alright.

and Dunkin- I'm really glad you liked the last line because I was pretty uncertain about it.

[Gingy]

wow powerful stuff here!! I haven't read your stuff before. It's really good, and I don't think you have anything to worry about submitting that as your exam piece. wonderful :) xx