lonely dreams

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poetgirl122
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lonely dreams

Post by poetgirl122 » Wed Feb 06, 2008 6:27 am

All i have are lonely dreams,
becouse life is nothing as it seems.
It tricks you, turns you,
cuts you , burns you.
And nothing is ever easy.
In a world where nothings fair,
we live in city's with poisonous air.
its holding our toungs, we can not speak.
we cant say whats really on our minds,
we're just to weak.
slowly but surely, the Earth is dying,
if you listen closely you can hear it crying.
and now all i have are lonly dreams,
becouse nothing in life is as it seems.
***Im stronger than the strongest drug you ever had. Mix them all together and i'd still be twice as bad. I know you wants some more.***

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Re: lonely dreams

Post by poetgirl122 » Thu Feb 07, 2008 5:10 am

thise isn't a very good poem, i know i could have written it better...but i'm still waiting 2 see what u guys thought, feel free 2 comment ok. :hello:
***Im stronger than the strongest drug you ever had. Mix them all together and i'd still be twice as bad. I know you wants some more.***

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Re: lonely dreams

Post by leapster » Sat Mar 01, 2008 11:24 am

I dont care what anyone says I really enjoyed this poem everyone has their own thoughts about everything so dont let anything get you down kepp it up
Peace

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Re: lonely dreams

Post by poetgirl122 » Mon Mar 03, 2008 10:47 am

thanks, glad you liked it. :thumbsup:
***Im stronger than the strongest drug you ever had. Mix them all together and i'd still be twice as bad. I know you wants some more.***

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Re: lonely dreams

Post by blackbanner » Wed Mar 05, 2008 9:49 pm

i liked it. it had a nice flow. Don't rip on your own work, just ask for some comments on it.
"so now he waits
in his own little hell
surrounded by the
the very things he came to escape"
BlackBanner

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Re: lonely dreams

Post by poetgirl122 » Wed Mar 12, 2008 4:47 am

thanks black banner, glad you liked it. I'm usually my own worst critic! :darn: thanks for reading :thumbsup:
***Im stronger than the strongest drug you ever had. Mix them all together and i'd still be twice as bad. I know you wants some more.***

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