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**I am the Painter** Forum Award Winner

Post by blackbanner » Fri Jul 27, 2007 10:04 pm

Forum Award Winner: September 22, 2007
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I am the Painter

I am the painter
whose strokes are fast
brutal, in fact
the red lines
so sharp in his face
I paint him with hate
as my fists turn red
blurred images of
angry eyes and death
turn my hate to rage
insane with pain
I roar
painting my emotion on his face
in devastation
"so now he waits
in his own little hell
surrounded by the
the very things he came to escape"
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Post by Gingy » Sat Jul 28, 2007 12:33 pm

wow, powerful imagery!! this from personal experience at all?! if so, hope you relieve yourself of this anger soon!

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Post by blackbanner » Sun Jul 29, 2007 12:49 am

not quite personal experience. I almost did this but I have not yet done so.
"so now he waits
in his own little hell
surrounded by the
the very things he came to escape"
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Post by Gingy » Sun Jul 29, 2007 9:36 am

lol u know how you feel, I quite often wish I was talented in the arts so as to take out my frusrations on something like this. Still, that's what poetry is for as well, eh? lol.

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Post by blackbanner » Sun Jul 29, 2007 10:43 am

yes well i am not talented either....its more metaphorical you see.... :mrgreen:
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the very things he came to escape"
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Post by Gingy » Thu Aug 09, 2007 11:42 am

hehe oh rite i see, sorry it took so long to reply, i have been away on holiday in Devon for 10days. Still I love the poem neways.

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Post by blackbanner » Thu Aug 09, 2007 2:43 pm

Its all good. Hope you had a good time!

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the very things he came to escape"
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Post by Graeme » Thu Aug 09, 2007 4:11 pm

the image is strong!
This above all to thine own self be true.

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Post by jeannerené » Thu Aug 09, 2007 10:14 pm

..slashing that emotion across his face..with force and with revenge..I could really see the blood/hate splashing on the walls in this one...

.very effective.
.jeanne.
... and his words purge up and outward,
expelled and onward through desert dust swallowed,
sands he says that gorge on simple sensibilities.
And, now he spits fragments, grit, extended vowels and elongated syllables
over cracked lips. Their sounds fall
piling round his boots…
~ jeannerené

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Post by blackbanner » Sat Aug 11, 2007 11:42 pm

thanks jeanne
much appreciated
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Post by heinzs » Sat Sep 22, 2007 6:55 pm

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Post by blackbanner » Sat Sep 29, 2007 11:01 am

Thanks everyone!
wow forum award...
never expected that!
yay

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