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Blackchaos88
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Haunted

Post by Blackchaos88 » Wed Mar 28, 2007 11:24 am

March 28th 2007 Haunted Justine Hill

Is there ever going to be a time, when I am not alone? Seems like I am lost and spinning in another zone.
Thought he was the one, thought I was in love, my voice stands apart, like the cry of a solitary dove.

So much for true love, and all that stuff. That’s it I have had enough.
I’m through with the crying, with the pain. With getting left out in the rain.
I’ll just go back to being invisible. To just being predictable.
How you look is haunting and your words are taunting.

There is no chance for one more day. Am I always going to feel this way?
I don’t belong anywhere. All these people ever do is stare!
Never wanting to know the real me, how long do I have to plea?

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Post by heinzs » Sat Apr 14, 2007 9:08 am

The long lines make it a bit harder to read... perhaps split them at the internal rhyme making it a series of rhyming couplets.
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Re: Haunted

Post by heinzs » Sat May 21, 2011 4:29 pm

:grin:
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