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TheMillionHope
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Post by TheMillionHope » Sat Dec 09, 2006 11:50 pm

If there were these so called dark clouds
I would be the one to blow them all away
Mind if I lead the battle between life and death?
I don’t need any swords, shields, or armor
All I need is my soul

As I jump off the sky and sink towards the ocean of darkness
Further and further and further and further and further
Without a single breath--I die

Only to find my soul pass me by
Sinking further and further and further
“Don't listen to friends when the Friend inside you says 'Do this.'” -Go Ghandi!

“Judge a man by his questions rather than by his answers” -Voltaire

"True friends stab you in the front" -Go Oscar Wilde!

“To succeed in life, you need two things: ignorance and confidence.” -Go Mark Twain!

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Jimi
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Post by Jimi » Mon Dec 18, 2006 5:27 pm

I'm going to have to read this one over a few more times. The part where your soul passes by your mortal corpse and beyond, really grabbed my attention.

I'm a real lover of short pieces that manage to pack in plenty for me to think about. Even if it's just one image, if I want to ponder on that image after I've gone away from reading it ...

... thanks for the image.

//Jimi
Poetry is just the evidence of life. If your life is burning well, poetry is just the ash.
(Leonard Cohen)

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heinzs
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Post by heinzs » Tue Feb 20, 2007 10:22 pm

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