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Post by heartstrong » Wed Oct 11, 2006 5:51 pm

Break the clock,
It’s useless now,
In lurches, lulls,
Time passes by,
Uneven and distorted,
The sun sagging beneath,
The horizon,

Again I wait,
For the shadow to stop,
Dancing on my wall,
So I can sleep,
Without waking,
Seeing the clock,
Change its hours,
Again,

Another blow,
Tattered, tortured,
Praying for an,
End to this,
Insanity,
Nothing stays the same,
When someone’s gone,
Again,

Standing still,
In a portrait,
Shattered on the floor,
Tossed by time,
And worn by rain,
The clock won’t stop,
Annoying me,
Running,
Even though I’m,
All alone.
Two things are infinite: the universe and human stupidity; and I'm not sure about the universe.

~Albert Einstein

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Post by Debbie » Thu Oct 12, 2006 5:44 am

time can be long when we are alone..or can't sleep we wish it would just stop..
good one... :bow: :bow: :hello:
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Post by heinzs » Sun Nov 26, 2006 11:13 am

:cool: :cool:
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Post by Gingy » Wed Nov 29, 2006 11:44 am

wow'o i like it! very interesting and a good use of imagery i especially like this part
Again I wait,
For the shadow to stop,
Dancing on my wall,
So I can sleep,
Without waking,
Seeing the clock,
Change its hours,
Again,
I know how that feels! :roll:
good write luv gingy :hello:

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Post by heartstrong » Wed Nov 29, 2006 7:35 pm

Thanks guys! I just popped in for a sec, and I'm glad you liked this one. :hello: I'll try to stop in again for more than three minutes.
Two things are infinite: the universe and human stupidity; and I'm not sure about the universe.

~Albert Einstein

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Post by negatvone » Wed Nov 29, 2006 11:02 pm

I love the Avatar. :mrgreen:

How about "Be an optimist.... kill a pessimist"? :mrgreen:

Nice poem for you to drop in our laps. How is school treating you these days?
Entering the sanctuary of my mind may lead to perils of unknown magnitude.......... hold on and embrace the ride. Feel the tolls as we pass from existance into my sought domain of twisted reality. -negatv: 5/05-

If I changed anything I have done in my life I wouldn't be me. Personally, I kinda like me. I'm an asshole, but I'm my kind of asshole.

Friends are what help me guide myself through life. I just have to find the right direction first. -negatv- 10/06

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Post by heartstrong » Thu Nov 30, 2006 11:15 am

LOL

And school's pretty good, but I don't like public school. The lockers are ancient and I'm convinced the doors are going to break off one day or the other. Eh, what can I do? I can't wait 'til winter break, though.
But I can't say the same thing about everything else. I babysit these two kids, and the younger one can give a bottle of aspirins a headache, I swear. Some days it's not really worth a hundred bucks a week. And if I can figure out how to fill out these damn forms on my desk, I might be able to take the SATs a few years early, just to see what it's like. It's part of this big program, which can't make regular forms that don't use every single word in the stinkin' dictionary.
Two things are infinite: the universe and human stupidity; and I'm not sure about the universe.

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Post by negatvone » Thu Nov 30, 2006 11:46 am

Best of luck to you. It would be in your favor to get them done early.

I always hated public schools, as well. Make sure you stay in touch.

If you have any trouble, let me know. :thumbsup:
Entering the sanctuary of my mind may lead to perils of unknown magnitude.......... hold on and embrace the ride. Feel the tolls as we pass from existance into my sought domain of twisted reality. -negatv: 5/05-

If I changed anything I have done in my life I wouldn't be me. Personally, I kinda like me. I'm an asshole, but I'm my kind of asshole.

Friends are what help me guide myself through life. I just have to find the right direction first. -negatv- 10/06

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Post by heartstrong » Thu Nov 30, 2006 12:35 pm

Will do :hello:
Two things are infinite: the universe and human stupidity; and I'm not sure about the universe.

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Post by IMSANE » Sat Dec 02, 2006 12:17 am

If I could fall into the sky do you really think God would let time pass me by?
"Contradictions do not exist. Whenever you think that you are facing a contradiction, check your premises. You will find that one of them is wrong." Ayn Rand

"Sorrow has it's reward. It never leaves us where it found us......The cup our Father hath given, shall we not drink it and learn the lessons He teaches" Mary Baker Eddy

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Post by Angeleyes » Mon Dec 04, 2006 9:10 pm

NICE!!!!! :mrgreen: :bow:






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Post by heartstrong » Sun Dec 10, 2006 7:00 am

Thank you! :hello:
Two things are infinite: the universe and human stupidity; and I'm not sure about the universe.

~Albert Einstein

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Post by Jimi » Mon Dec 18, 2006 5:20 pm

I enjoyed reading this. There is some really tight imagery going on here.

I'm interested to know why you broke the flow with a comma at the end of each line, it was an intersting literary device.

I'll be sure to look up more of your work, if it's all of this standard you're on to a winner! :grin:

Thanks for sharing.

//Jimi
Poetry is just the evidence of life. If your life is burning well, poetry is just the ash.
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Post by heartstrong » Mon Dec 18, 2006 7:50 pm

Ah, commas. They're an involuntary reflex, I suppose, but ever useful. Thank you for your reply, I just felt my self-esteem go up a notch. :hello:
Two things are infinite: the universe and human stupidity; and I'm not sure about the universe.

~Albert Einstein

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Post by Blaze » Fri Feb 09, 2007 9:23 pm

Loved it.
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