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Post by MJPease » Tue Jan 05, 2010 11:31 am

leaves never fall
they are pushed
tumbling into
gravity's hold
and merciless
winter.

MJPease 01/05/2010

The Earth The Son and The Moon
Take me back, so far back, adjust this fate. Afeared lately of pen, in abscence of light. The fear I might stumble upon a plagiarized soul. Wipe this dark slate clean, regain my thought. Add the words that rekindle my depth of soul.

From: Summers Discontent 7-24-02

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Post by bags123 » Wed Jan 06, 2010 10:21 am

Kind of has an oriental flavor to this one Michael. I like it. :thumbsup:
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Post by moonflower » Wed Jan 06, 2010 7:28 pm

i love this!..short and meaningful at the same time!.. :thumbsup: :grin:
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Post by MJPease » Thu Jan 07, 2010 11:20 am

Thanks Bags I knew you wouldn't leave me hang'n with a big fat 0 replies. Oriental in a philosphical way? Take Care
Take me back, so far back, adjust this fate. Afeared lately of pen, in abscence of light. The fear I might stumble upon a plagiarized soul. Wipe this dark slate clean, regain my thought. Add the words that rekindle my depth of soul.

From: Summers Discontent 7-24-02

Sincerely

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Post by MJPease » Thu Jan 07, 2010 11:27 am

Hello moonflower, Valerie short and meaningful is the intention. I hope the meaning is not ambiguous. I was shooting for narcissistic short and sweet accuracy. Thanks and Take Care
Take me back, so far back, adjust this fate. Afeared lately of pen, in abscence of light. The fear I might stumble upon a plagiarized soul. Wipe this dark slate clean, regain my thought. Add the words that rekindle my depth of soul.

From: Summers Discontent 7-24-02

Sincerely

Michael J Pease

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Post by wblogan » Mon Jan 11, 2010 10:33 pm

I like it very much,
I like short and to the point.
I liked the form and the
sound of it out loud.
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Post by MJPease » Wed Jan 13, 2010 9:50 am

Thanks wblogen, Your comments are always appreciated. Take Care
Take me back, so far back, adjust this fate. Afeared lately of pen, in abscence of light. The fear I might stumble upon a plagiarized soul. Wipe this dark slate clean, regain my thought. Add the words that rekindle my depth of soul.

From: Summers Discontent 7-24-02

Sincerely

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Post by Serenem » Wed Jan 13, 2010 11:23 am

Hi, MjPease!

I have to say that I really like this short poem and the image it paints. I like the thought that the leaf hangs on until it is pushed. I have written poems with similar images! Thanks for the excellent read!

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Post by MJPease » Fri Jan 15, 2010 11:18 am

Hello Serenem, It's a pleasure to meet you in a cyber kind of way. Your comments are greatly appreciated. Take Care
Take me back, so far back, adjust this fate. Afeared lately of pen, in abscence of light. The fear I might stumble upon a plagiarized soul. Wipe this dark slate clean, regain my thought. Add the words that rekindle my depth of soul.

From: Summers Discontent 7-24-02

Sincerely

Michael J Pease

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