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Milk White Chocolate
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Greed

Post by Milk White Chocolate » Tue Mar 20, 2007 11:50 am

Greed

Feed me words,
And all the love I deserve.
Feed me with tenderness,
Feed me till I am whole.
Come feed,
My dirty black soul.
Money don't make me so broke can't break me.
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Post by moonflower » Tue Mar 20, 2007 9:26 pm

hey, i love this one Milk! :thumbsup: :lol:
inside each soul there is music...let the music play..

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Post by Milk White Chocolate » Thu Mar 22, 2007 9:22 am

:hello:
Thanks Moonflower!
I checked out your Poetry Page and I must say I really like your poem "That was then...This is now". It made me giggle...it's so true! :grin:
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Post by LostNight » Fri Mar 23, 2007 10:02 pm

MWC, Good stuff...... Greed the title then short to the last line (My dirty black soul) :devil: I like it!..... Its easy to place the poem to the third person or with someone with over-power :whip: .......... Great choice of power words and delivery too.... LostNight
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as we grow

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Post by Milk White Chocolate » Mon Mar 26, 2007 6:51 am

:hello:
Thanks Lostnight!
I see that you understood that it could be placed in the third person. :wink:
This is really about someone I use to know and the way they use to be but by using the "I" I found it had more power!
I'm so glad you noticed that! :thumbsup:
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Post by Graeme » Thu Mar 29, 2007 9:48 am

yes - I does make it more powerful

great poem!
This above all to thine own self be true.

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Post by moonflower » Mon Apr 02, 2007 8:12 pm

thank you so much for visiting my 'page'! :grin: ..and im so glad you liked my poem!.. :lol:
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Post by nekot » Sun Apr 29, 2007 8:18 am

Another impacting write.

I feel a craving for acceptance. 'Tis a true and undeniable greed need we all have. :bow: I also feel a shame/self-hatred associated with the craving, like the lie many of us have been fed: that to have this need makes one weak.

The poem took me by surprise. When I read the title I thought it might be about social greed.

Nice piece MWC.

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Post by Milk White Chocolate » Tue May 01, 2007 6:56 am

:hello:
Thanks Nekot for commenting...
I have found from experience that greed can be good and sometimes bad, I think all depends on the needs....because the need to be loved and accepted is not bad, it's vital for each human being. But like you say society can make us feel weak to have needs...but for me, on the contrary I find that the one who is not afraid to admit to his needs is strong and wise because he/she is listening to his heart and innerself and therefore in accepting his needs he/she will be able to work towards being fullfilled...
Hope I made some sort of sense.... :wink:

Graeme, sorry not to have thanked you earlier for commenting on my write...I must have missed your post!
Thanks ever so much for posting on my poem...It's funny isn't it, how one word can change the whole impact in a poem :grin:
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