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Patterns

Post by Gillian » Wed Sep 06, 2006 12:12 pm

Tracing patterns
on wallpaper
with manicured nails,
more used to
tracing the patterns
of your skin
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Post by ninian » Wed Sep 06, 2006 5:56 pm

i like this image, gillian....however, it feels unfinished to me ....
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Post by Gillian » Thu Sep 07, 2006 6:11 am

Hi Nin,

You're so right....the first two lines were a thought I'd written down years ago in a journal, the last four lines were a feeble attempt to finish something. I didn't think it through, just as they say 'tossed it off' - sometimes a mistake.

At this point I don't even know if it's worth trying to finish it.

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Post by ninian » Thu Sep 07, 2006 12:12 pm

oh i think the image is worthy of an entire poem behind it...you should see what you can do with it, gillian! i really admire your use of imagery in your work...

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Post by heinzs » Thu Sep 07, 2006 2:12 pm

ditto


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Post by moonflower » Sat Sep 30, 2006 5:50 pm

i love how the depth of this piece is portrayed with just a few words..i could see and 'feel' the graceful manicured nails, tracing the unknown patterns of the wallpaper..a lovely piece to add on to, but its beautiful just as it is too..! :thumbsup:
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Re: Patterns

Post by heinzs » Thu Jun 28, 2012 11:25 pm

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