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Post by debab » Tue Sep 06, 2005 1:29 pm

or how I spent 6 days Manhattan



determined faces
streets crammed with noise and taxis
a leaf slowly drifts
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bridges touch the sky
stores display Jimmy Choo shoes
I'm in paradise
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Manhattan tourists -
my sister only has eyes
for brawny firemen
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sweating in long lines -
warned, be enthusiastic
or incur his wrath

(note: waiting for entrance to the David Letterman Show)
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gorging on such art
I ask at the info desk
may I move in here?

(note: NY Metropolitan Museum of Art)
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nephew's idea -
Yankees vs White Sox game
fan jumps into net
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lost in Tribecca
or maybe Soho, who cares?
corned beef sandwiches!
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medieval building
white unicorn in flowers
dances on the wall

(note: the Cloisters)
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missing Chicago
breezy air, lakeshore beaches
trashcans in alleys
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...Yet the stones remain less real to those who cannot
name them, or read the mute syllables graven in silica.
To see a red stone is less than seeing it as jasper—
metamorphic quartz, cousin to the flint the Kiowa
carved as arrowheads.
To name is to know and remember
_____________'Words', Dana Gioia







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Post by heinzs » Tue Sep 06, 2005 2:09 pm

Great haiku series Deb!


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Post by Debbie » Tue Sep 06, 2005 5:14 pm

these were very enlightening Debby...I like the way you layed them all out...good work girl..
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Post by debab » Wed Sep 07, 2005 12:02 pm

i like to write haiku on postcards, to send when on vacation. The size of the card is perfect for the 3 lines and all I have time for, ... plus they're fun to write. :lol: thanks Heinz and Debbie.
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...Yet the stones remain less real to those who cannot
name them, or read the mute syllables graven in silica.
To see a red stone is less than seeing it as jasper—
metamorphic quartz, cousin to the flint the Kiowa
carved as arrowheads.
To name is to know and remember
_____________'Words', Dana Gioia







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Post by Debbie » Wed Sep 07, 2005 12:38 pm

That sounds like a great idea..because so few lines is able to say so much... :cool:
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Post by moonflower » Thu Sep 08, 2005 6:01 am

enjoyed seeing Manhatten through these little gems debab :lol: ..a great series of haiku!..
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Post by heinzs » Sun Sep 17, 2006 2:16 pm

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