SON WORSHIP

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nacona
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Post by nacona » Tue Dec 05, 2006 5:46 pm

Gordy,

You're very welcome! I always say that if the poet still looks at a poem with such a critical eye then the chances are the poem is yet to be finished, that said I will take a better look at this tomorrow and break it down into a more detailed crit for you. I would do it tonight but I am tired, I had a very long day at work. Until then--

Cheers!

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Re: SON WORSHIP

Post by gordy » Sat Jul 26, 2008 12:13 pm

:mrgreen:
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My Jesus hung out with thieves and sluts and liars, which Jesus do you worship?

---Todd Agnew


Perfection is my enemy
Procrastination is his cohort
Persistence is my sword

---Gordy

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Re: SON WORSHIP

Post by heinzs » Sat Jul 26, 2008 1:25 pm

I love the way you can trace the "history" of a piece this way with the chronological order of comments, etc. Does it really feel like you wrote this six years ago? Where did the time in between go?
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Re: SON WORSHIP

Post by gordy » Sat Jul 26, 2008 3:41 pm

i know!!! i love that too...... i hate when my posts get pruned and i lose all the old cool comments from people who are no longer here or..... well you know :mrgreen:


yes this was my first poem that i posted i think...........
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My Jesus hung out with thieves and sluts and liars, which Jesus do you worship?

---Todd Agnew


Perfection is my enemy
Procrastination is his cohort
Persistence is my sword

---Gordy

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Re: SON WORSHIP

Post by heinzs » Sun Jul 27, 2008 12:00 pm

Well, this forum doesn't prune so it's safe here. I know you understand why other forums need the autoprune on. We'd run out of disc space if not... lol.
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Re: SON WORSHIP

Post by gordy » Sun Jul 27, 2008 1:02 pm

oh i understand , i dont have a problem with it, itsusually my fault for not bumping my poems up.........im not as good at catching them now that we dont have a "your topics" button
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My Jesus hung out with thieves and sluts and liars, which Jesus do you worship?

---Todd Agnew


Perfection is my enemy
Procrastination is his cohort
Persistence is my sword

---Gordy

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Re: SON WORSHIP

Post by heinzs » Mon Jul 28, 2008 10:29 pm

In the upper right hand corner of the window is a "user control panel" button. Click on that. The next window will offer you a "show your posts" link. I know, it's not "topics", but it's a place to start.
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Re: SON WORSHIP

Post by snorple » Tue Oct 28, 2008 2:49 pm

Beautiful.

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Re: SON WORSHIP

Post by gordy » Tue Oct 27, 2009 2:52 pm

:mrgreen:
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My Jesus hung out with thieves and sluts and liars, which Jesus do you worship?

---Todd Agnew


Perfection is my enemy
Procrastination is his cohort
Persistence is my sword

---Gordy

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