Love Fades

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Love Fades

Post by bags123 » Sun Feb 08, 2015 4:40 am

Love Fades

It always seems to be that way
When love is young it's there to stay
Then time moves on and passion fades
Forgotten, lost, perhaps mislaid

On dusty shelves with poems prepared
From different times when life was shared
When love was young it planned to stay
Then time moves on and passion fades

It always seems to be that way
Love's left behind more everyday
Forgotten, lost, love's passion fades
What grows so fast too soon decays
I prefer to keep an open mind,....but not so much that my brains fall out.- Carl Sagan
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Re: Love Fades

Post by kuperian4ever » Sat Feb 14, 2015 2:55 pm

In my life it decays just like ununoctium.
Damn, it was there and then it wasn't.


My critique is that this is well written
I enjoyed reading it, pondering it, and looking up elemental decay rates


This poem, to me, is ready for the serving table. Eat 'em up


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Re: Love Fades

Post by heinzs » Mon Feb 16, 2015 3:16 pm

Beautiful use of iambic tetrameter
love the rondelle of themed rhymes.. almost like a pantoum
well constructed and executed, good sir.

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Re: Love Fades

Post by bags123 » Tue Feb 17, 2015 3:05 am

Thank you Kup and Heinz for your read and comments. Most appreciated. :hello:
I prefer to keep an open mind,....but not so much that my brains fall out.- Carl Sagan
Your brain is like an umbrella. It only works when it's open- Someone Smart


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