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Untitled (In Progress)

Post by kimmyjean » Sat Aug 03, 2013 9:05 pm

Have not written in awhile...it seems a bit choppy to me...opinions appreciated


Time has come for insurrection
Where tides augment into one
Drowning within portentous thresholds
Twisting a collective fracture

Lost innocence revolving to bitterness
Where truth begets a lie
Enlarging into false authenticity
Radial ripples spinning out of control

Crashing orbital blitzes
Pillaging a no man’s land
Blowing emptiness into orifices
Imploding from within

Falling into epitome of endurance
Growing the threads of destiny
Swimming inside a devotion of dreams
Webbed inside a lifetime of yesterdays

Inside the glow of the moon
We become survivors of emotional wastelands
Longing for the crack of dawn
Inside the eye of the storm
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Mortal lovers must not try to remain at the first step; for lasting passion is the dream of a harlot and from it we wake in despair.-C. S. Lewis
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Re: Untitled (In Progress)

Post by heinzs » Fri Aug 30, 2013 9:23 am

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