Nothing In The Way
The forward path is shortened
Disappearing in the shadows
Where pavements blend
in narrow ribbons
Foggy, fingered,
tendrils
Across a map that only shows
all the places
that I've been
I'll recognize each marker,
for each towns
Best Western Inn.
The forward path however,
still remains a mystery
Hidden by
the same old hauntings
Choices past
that shouldn't be
Disadvantaged by times progress
I'll advance
until that day
When everything is clear again
When nothing's
in the way.
Nothing In The Way
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Nothing In The Way
I prefer to keep an open mind,....but not so much that my brains fall out.- Carl Sagan
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Re: The Forward Path
last stanza is a bit odd. Also check "thrist"...
An' it harm none, do what ye will. Blessed Be.
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Re: The Forward Path
Thanks Heinz,...I corrected Thrist and agree that the last stanza is odd. I'm working on something to correct that too.
I prefer to keep an open mind,....but not so much that my brains fall out.- Carl Sagan
Your brain is like an umbrella. It only works when it's open- Someone Smart
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Your brain is like an umbrella. It only works when it's open- Someone Smart
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Re: Nothing In The Way
I decided to change a number of things on this one. Including the title. Much happier with the result.
I prefer to keep an open mind,....but not so much that my brains fall out.- Carl Sagan
Your brain is like an umbrella. It only works when it's open- Someone Smart
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Your brain is like an umbrella. It only works when it's open- Someone Smart
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- heinzs
- The Fat Cat
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Re: Nothing In The Way
I likey very much! Definitely more "complete". Great job, Gerry!
An' it harm none, do what ye will. Blessed Be.
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Re: Nothing In The Way
I prefer to keep an open mind,....but not so much that my brains fall out.- Carl Sagan
Your brain is like an umbrella. It only works when it's open- Someone Smart
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March 2011
Your brain is like an umbrella. It only works when it's open- Someone Smart
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