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Haiku
Posted: Mon Apr 01, 2013 12:09 pm
by midnight_kitty_kat
Ah My Bittersweet Moon
Drearily Bouncing Bewitching Beams
Soundless in Evenings Air
I'm not terribly familiar with any form poetry. Is this a haiku??
Re: Haiku
Posted: Mon Apr 01, 2013 5:42 pm
by heinzs
Traditional haiku (in English) are of the format 5-7-5 syllables. If they contain some reference to a season of the year they may be considered haiku. Otherwise they are actually senryu, but no one makes that distinction except the purist. I don't know many of those... thank goodness.
Here's an example of haiku and senryu:
haiku:
In chilly winter,
Cones of white frost are forming,
Ending autumn's reign.
senryu:
Through the dark, I searched.
With fingers stretching, I reached.
Touching smoke, I wept.
Check our forum "briefs" and the topic "what's haiku anyway?"
viewtopic.php?f=2&t=16390
Re: Haiku
Posted: Mon Apr 01, 2013 11:00 pm
by midnight_kitty_kat
Aha I've reworked this one to be an actual haiku now or senryu i guess hah. Ever helpful you are heinzs.
My bittersweet Moon
Bouncing your bewitching beams
Soundless as night air
Re: Haiku
Posted: Mon Apr 01, 2013 11:21 pm
by heinzs
Cool... I like it very much!
Re: Haiku
Posted: Tue Apr 02, 2013 12:01 am
by midnight_kitty_kat
Woohoo success! I'm glad you liked it, I hold your opinion quite highly =)