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Post by partialpoet » Tue Aug 28, 2012 10:12 am

I knew he hurt; I saw the scars there on his skin and in his eyes;
I let him down when after all that time I never asked him why—
That boy I knew with the brilliant smile who hung himself outside.

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Re: Jake

Post by heinzs » Sat Sep 01, 2012 10:36 am

Grammatically it should be "hanged himself".
An' it harm none, do what ye will. Blessed Be.
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