What Gentleman Would Speak With Stones(A Villanelle)

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What Gentleman Would Speak With Stones(A Villanelle)

Post by bags123 » Fri Jun 22, 2012 12:18 pm

What Gentleman Would Speak With Stones

What gentleman would speak with stones
Dead voices litter earthen mounds
Beneath them lie my lover's bones

Inside her casket she intones
My name is her repeated sound
What gentleman would speak with stones

Or come here seeking the unknown
To spread red roses all around
Beneath them lie my lover's bones

Yes some forget what death bemoans
And they exist on what they've found
What gentleman would speak with stones

I hear the trees whose branches groan
Beside me as I stand earthbound
Beneath them lie my lover's bones

As night approaches I alone
Will leave my tears upon this ground
What gentleman would speak with stones
Beneath them lie my lover's bones
I prefer to keep an open mind,....but not so much that my brains fall out.- Carl Sagan
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Re: What Gentleman Would Speak With Stones(A Villanelle)

Post by heinzs » Fri Jun 22, 2012 6:11 pm

:bow: :bow:
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Re: What Gentleman Would Speak With Stones(A Villanelle)

Post by bags123 » Mon Jun 25, 2012 4:53 am

Thanks Heinz. I love Villanelles,...but this is the only decent one I've written. Tough form. :cheers:
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Re: What Gentleman Would Speak With Stones(A Villanelle)

Post by heinzs » Mon Jun 25, 2012 12:28 pm

Yeah it is a tough form. I notice you wrote this one back in 2004.

The best Villanelle I've ever seen is still Dylan Thomas's "Do Not Go Gentle Into that Good Night"

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Re: What Gentleman Would Speak With Stones(A Villanelle)

Post by bags123 » Tue Jun 26, 2012 4:37 am

I agree,....Dylans poem is the best. :thumbsup: Wow,....2004! Ancient history. :mrgreen:
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Re: What Gentleman Would Speak With Stones(A Villanelle)

Post by partialpoet » Tue Aug 28, 2012 10:30 am

I honestly don't know anything about forms, and very little about what smart people say constitutes a good poem.

But I like this one a lot. Very nice work.

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