The Return (Part 5)

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The Return (Part 5)

Post by bags123 » Tue Dec 13, 2011 5:58 am

The Return (Part 5)

Now barely could he force his mind to see
A solitary man beside the fire
Whose shadow fell across his memory
Unforgotten in his darkly robed attire.

Remembering the harshness of his tone
Cruel, insulting words, with threatning glances
While mother, by herself there all alone
Confronts him, as slowly he advances

Then just as she attempts to bar his way
Imposing all her power to stand between
Her child, and the man who came that day
The fire erupts around them unforseen

But he escapes the blazing home alarmed
Alone, unfairly blamed, but still unharmed
I prefer to keep an open mind,....but not so much that my brains fall out.- Carl Sagan
Your brain is like an umbrella. It only works when it's open- Someone Smart


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