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blues
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Mirror Image

Post by blues » Mon Nov 28, 2011 6:25 am

Hey you, stop staring at me
just stop it
stop looking at me
as if you know me
because you don't

Hey you, stop staring at me
just stop it
stop looking at me
as if you know what i am thinking
because you don't

Hey you there staring back at me
just stop it
stop looking at me and judging me
Because you shouldn't

Hey you there staring back at me
just stop it
there is no point to any of this
we should try to get on
Because after all you are my mirror image



Ok that is it. what do you guys think. just had the idea for this yesterday. any thoughts would be grately appreciated :)

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heinzs
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Re: Mirror Image

Post by heinzs » Mon Mar 05, 2012 12:40 pm

I don't know why this hasn't received any replies so far... our critiquers seem to be asleep or off skiing. I'm just here to bump it up to the top for further views... not enough hours in a day, it seems, to do what I wish to do.

Cheers!

Heinz
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