Design My Universe

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Lenny
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Design My Universe

Post by Lenny » Fri May 27, 2011 7:10 am

This life of mine, a bowl to give.
To fill bottom and brim
Loveliness, old or new.
Clay to fill; mold and make,
Give and take.
To fill,
With you,
Dear love, with you

My heart, an ocean to fill.
Sea of time to travel near and far.
Your love to unravel -
Spend in full: Mind, body and soul.
Pass darkest depths and faintest shore
only for me to hold.
Room only,
With you,
dearest heart, with you.

Soul of mine, sky to fill.
space enough for the glimpse of eyes blue.
Hold one star, and know true
A trance.
With you,
Dear heart and love, with you

Lungs of mine, breeze free.
breath once mine,
Taken away?
breath made free, give to thee.
every day ,
With you,
Dear heart, with you.

This mind of mine - a humming bird
Flies in starry nights and morning dew
lightless nights,
endless skies,
reach nectar born only at home.
Fly in dusk or dawn,
To reach you,
heaven that is your eyes.
With you,
Dear heart, dear love, with you.



~Alyenendrov Tsorokean~
Pride is the recognition of the fact that you are your own highest value and, like all of man’s values, it has to be earned.

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Re: Design My Universe

Post by bags123 » Wed Jun 01, 2011 2:50 pm

Very nice Lenny. Throughly enjoyed. :thumbsup:
I prefer to keep an open mind,....but not so much that my brains fall out.- Carl Sagan
Your brain is like an umbrella. It only works when it's open- Someone Smart


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poetonadryspell
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Re: Design My Universe

Post by poetonadryspell » Thu Jun 02, 2011 2:36 pm

very nice poem. I hope to read more of you're work soon.
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