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Post by midnight_kitty_kat » Thu Dec 09, 2010 7:32 am

You look at me,
with once familiar eyes.
The color of liquid amber has changed.
Replaced by a dark brooding brown.
The gentle pools, the windows to your soul
are now raging.
Violent, the turbulence waxing,
beneath the confusion.

I stare.
Watching the sunlight glance
off the lashes I have kissed a thousand times.
The hate, the confusion, the fear,
despair ensues.

I long for it.
The teasing laughter,
sweet good mornings,
even the bickering.
But what I miss most of all is
our Silence.
Car rides, lingering touches,
walking to the river.

I know you miss it too.
Somwhere.
Locked in the prison of your own
mind and cataclysmic fear.
Please come back.



I made a few more edits to all of the verses. I'm still not sure if this is the finished product or not. It's been a while since I've read this. This poem may evolve into something else at some point because the person it's about has since committed suicide which brings a whole new wave of feelings and memories. I'm still trying to put a title to it, maybe it'll come to bme some day.
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Post by heinzs » Fri Dec 31, 2010 2:15 pm

It is a great "catch" of the moment. Some would wish a bit "more", while others may want even less. You must be the judge of the poem's completeness.

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Post by Jadynara » Wed Jan 19, 2011 10:44 am

This is a very striking and powerful poem. You capture the moment very well. You leave to the imagination of the reader what has made him change. Lovely writing dear poet.
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