Autistic Children

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Autistic Children

Post by Jadynara » Tue Sep 21, 2010 2:36 pm

Amazing little people,
Unique in every way,
Testing thier own limits
In earnest every day.
So many things to teach them,
Their parents struggle hard
Ingraining daily values,
Culturing their ward.

Children full of laughter
Happiness and smiles
Instilling inspiration
Loving all the while
Despite what you may think,
Remember they're like you.
Every single day these kids
Need understanding too.

For Elijah and Zachary.
So we're lost, at least we've found each other. Take my hand, if we can't find our way out of the dark, we can make our own light. - Nicole M. Goretzke 2011

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Re: Please HELP!

Post by gordy » Tue Sep 21, 2010 3:12 pm

:bow: excellent tribute,i see nothing to be worried about at all

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Procrastination is his cohort
Persistence is my sword

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Re: Please HELP!

Post by Jadynara » Tue Sep 21, 2010 4:18 pm

lol - i moved it into tributes
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Re: Please HELP!

Post by gordy » Tue Sep 21, 2010 4:43 pm

hehehe i figured that out eventually :grin:
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My Jesus hung out with thieves and sluts and liars, which Jesus do you worship?

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Perfection is my enemy
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Persistence is my sword

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Re: Autistic Children

Post by Eternum 1 » Tue Sep 21, 2010 7:10 pm

I love all my grandchlidren but the autistic child seems more ethereal and waifish in my mind. I see it clearly in our family photos..that presence unaffected by adult demands or childish power structures.

His name is Seth.

Nice acrostic by the way.
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Re: Autistic Children

Post by Jadynara » Tue Sep 21, 2010 8:06 pm

I think people are not aware enough of autism. This piece is very close to my heart. I will be giving htis to Zack and Elijah's mom - one of my closest friends.
So we're lost, at least we've found each other. Take my hand, if we can't find our way out of the dark, we can make our own light. - Nicole M. Goretzke 2011

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Re: Please HELP!

Post by heinzs » Wed Sep 22, 2010 7:54 pm

lol When moving a topic, make sure you do so from the menu at the bottom. Otherwise you just move the one post. I'll try to recombine these.

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Re: Please HELP!

Post by Jadynara » Wed Sep 22, 2010 8:11 pm

thanks heinz... im still getting used to the moderator tools.
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Re: Please HELP!

Post by heinzs » Thu Sep 23, 2010 7:58 pm

Of course now I have absolutely no idea what the original post was... lol.

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Re: Please HELP!

Post by Jadynara » Thu Sep 23, 2010 10:46 pm

Autistic Children in tributes
So we're lost, at least we've found each other. Take my hand, if we can't find our way out of the dark, we can make our own light. - Nicole M. Goretzke 2011

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Re: Please HELP!

Post by Jadynara » Thu Sep 23, 2010 10:49 pm

there we go ... i think that's as good as its going to get.
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Re: Autistic Children

Post by heinzs » Fri Sep 24, 2010 4:15 pm

Ok. I think this works for now... lol.

oh, btw I love the poem.

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Re: Autistic Children

Post by heinzs » Fri Sep 24, 2010 4:17 pm

Oh, and the program still thinks Gordy wrote it... lol.
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Re: Autistic Children

Post by Jadynara » Fri Sep 24, 2010 6:08 pm

lol
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Re: Autistic Children

Post by bags123 » Sun Sep 26, 2010 7:03 am

Great poem Gordy! :cheers:
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