Another Then And Now Moment

[Jadynara]

http://www.everypoet.org/pffa/showthread.php?t=72207

[heinzs]

Again, I apologize. I could have just deleted my comment, but chose instead to offer you the benefit of the doubt to see my visceral response. I suspect that knowing someone may be having difficulties with your work is better than being totally ignored... and I've been known to do that as well.

As for your "welcome"... please be assured that your presence is most welcome... especially in light of your wilingness to respond and interact.

Cheers to you, and may I come to understand your style over time.

[negatvone]

Yeah, pops scolded me for hijacking your thread. Sorry about that. And, welcome.

[charles.degollado]

@Heinz

I've never read one word on the subject of poetry until joining this forum.
Eye-opening stuff so far. The points you made here are much clearer now.
I joined in hopes to learn and improve, thanks for the pressing.

[heinzs]

Thank you for the opportunity to view the subject from a fresh perspective.

[charles.degollado]

Rewrite

Late valley hero, forever known
Below the yellow brick toll
Steady clad and hyper natural
Enemy of the history capsule
Under the spell of a rare number
Along sleeping summer snow
Alive in a dream worth monster
Revolving the miracle closed

[charles.degollado]

Finished.

Truly shifters yell
Nothing formally for a holly feature
Sleeping wasted,
Reaching summer snow,
Contagious to continue
In a carol bustle pivot-
Thick gypsy definition giclee.