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The Unresolved 2

I've wondered since I was a lad
So many questions I once had,
but through the years most answers came
The unresolved were what remained

I've found them harder to ignore
Increasingly, since I days of yore
Each time I think they're gone for good
they come back like I knew they would

Perhaps some things I needn't know
No matter how old I may grow
My lists of questions over time
still unresolved, till I'm resigned

In the first stanza i would change "but" to "though". And it seems like there's more to it... something missing.

Perhaps some things I needn't know
No matter how old I may grow
My lists of questions over time
still unresolved, but always mine

What about your lists? What are you doing with them? How are you dealing with the fact that even after all these years they remain unresolved? I feel like I am missing part of the story... I really like it, but I feel like it's missing it's end like this. The only way i could think to change it and meet finality in the final sentence is to change "but" to "are"

Jady

Good critique Jady. I went back and forth in the final line between "but" and "are". Actually,... I like it both ways,..but decided to stay with but. I've been a but guy from way back.

ROFL!! Well as long as you like it that way... that's the way it should stay - just thought i would throw in my 2 cents

bags123 wrote:The Unresolved 2

I've wondered since I was a lad
So many questions I once had,
but through the years most answers came
The unresolved were what remained

I've found them harder to ignore
Increasingly, since I was four
Each time I think they're gone for good
they come back like I knew they would

Perhaps some things I needn't know
No matter how old I may grow
My lists of questions over time
still unresolved till I'm resigned.

What do you think about this edited change to the last line? Better, Worse, Neutral ?

i think it has a much better sense of ending with the edited version of the last line.

Jadynara wrote:i think it has a much better sense of ending with the edited version of the last line.

I agree,...thanks for originally pointing that out. You've a keen eye.

Surrender and you have taken the first step to understanding the gift of knowing. In your last line an eternal truth is within grasp.---BeeJay

BeeJay wrote:Surrender and you have taken the first step to understanding the gift of knowing. In your last line an eternal truth is within grasp.---BeeJay

OK Beejay,....thanks.