We will get married in
Saint Dominic Church Tomorrow.
I am very anxious about
That event which will happen
Smoothly and anxious how
I treat my guests without
Complaints any and manners
Behave me to receipt them.
It is a miracle given us by
God after years of love
Between us and stress
I make a correction in our
Invitation we will get
Married on tomorrow
Instead of I wed she.
MY MARRIAGE
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I think I catch where you are going. I am ever intrigued by the subtle nuances that can be achieved in English by non-English poets.


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heinzs wrote:I think I catch where you are going. I am ever intrigued by the subtle nuances that can be achieved in English by non-English poets.
Unfortunately,... I don't,...and remain quite puzzled after reading through 3 times.

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An' it harm none, do what ye will. Blessed Be.

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Re: MY MARRIAGE
We will get married in
Saint Dominic Church Tomorrow.
I am very anxious about
That event which will happen
Smoothly and anxious how
I treat my guests without
Complaints any and manners
Behave me to receipt them.
It is a miracle given us by
God after years of love
Between us and stress
I make a correction in our
Invitation we will get
Married on tomorrow
Instead of I wed she.
Your first line was very direct, and I knew the beginning of where you were going, then the words kind of read as though they really didn't match what you're trying to say. Especially the ending, so I'm not sure if English is your second lanquage, or if you meant it to word this way. "Behave me to receipt them" makes no sense to me, what were you trying to say?
Your last line lost me, starting with "instead" because it left me with "instead of what?"
Please explain if you'd like,
Mj
Saint Dominic Church Tomorrow.
I am very anxious about
That event which will happen
Smoothly and anxious how
I treat my guests without
Complaints any and manners
Behave me to receipt them.
It is a miracle given us by
God after years of love
Between us and stress
I make a correction in our
Invitation we will get
Married on tomorrow
Instead of I wed she.
Your first line was very direct, and I knew the beginning of where you were going, then the words kind of read as though they really didn't match what you're trying to say. Especially the ending, so I'm not sure if English is your second lanquage, or if you meant it to word this way. "Behave me to receipt them" makes no sense to me, what were you trying to say?
Your last line lost me, starting with "instead" because it left me with "instead of what?"
Please explain if you'd like,
Mj
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