workshop/critiques wanted
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workshop/critiques wanted
Trampled pathway
tattered garden gate
guards broken dreams
terra cotta memories and
hopeless probabilities.
Swings open
dreams, aspirations lost
now unfurl
misplaced expectations
gather possibilities.
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Re: workshop/critiques wanted
How about a shuffling:
Tattered garden gate
guards broken dreams
trampled pathway
terra cotta memories and
hopeless probabilities.
Swings open
dreams, aspirations lost
now unfurl
misplaced expectations
gather possibilities.
Tattered garden gate
guards broken dreams
trampled pathway
terra cotta memories and
hopeless probabilities.
Swings open
dreams, aspirations lost
now unfurl
misplaced expectations
gather possibilities.
An' it harm none, do what ye will. Blessed Be.
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Re: workshop/critiques wanted
Now, that's an idea. Thanks
I worked a bit on it yesterday. It's a tad longer.
I worked a bit on it yesterday. It's a tad longer.
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