Sipping Coffee At Chicago Airport Loungue

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karanamrao
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Sipping Coffee At Chicago Airport Loungue

Post by karanamrao » Sat Jan 26, 2008 7:51 am

sipping coffee
at sprawling airport
lounge of chicago
is like entering a
neatly packaged world
of freedom
when the black coffee
churns out memories
of naked hand shakes
the rustle of blue eyes
the giggle of noises
and endless au revoirs
Written seven books of poetry.,and many of the poems are anthologised and critiqued.Won poetry awards like the Poet of the Merit Award from USA,and from Poets India.

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Re: Sipping Coffee At Chicago Airport Loungue

Post by heinzs » Sat Jan 26, 2008 12:35 pm

A charming vignette.

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Re: Sipping Coffee At Chicago Airport Loungue

Post by Graeme » Sun Jan 27, 2008 8:27 am

I hesitate to offer suggestions to one who has been sp [published, but here goes my ideas

sipping coffee
in the sprawling airport
lounge at Chicago O'Hare
is like entering a
eclectically packaged world (chaotically)
of freedom
where the black coffee
churns out memories
of naked hand shakes
a rustle of blue eyes
a gaggle of noises
and endless au revoirs
This above all to thine own self be true.

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