pursuing happiness{ please read, i need input here!!}

[psychotic pretender]

anyone else like to take a look???

if not

im gonna move it to the general forum tonight before i go to bed

if anyone thinks it still needs work PLEASE speak up

and thanks to everyone who already has!!!!

[Blue Tiger]

You could take this further in a sense because this 'search' never ends. Everytime you reach a hilltop....you'll see another stretch of "Forever" beckoning to you.

(That's why the endings of mine are always so stilted)

But....you opened Pandora's box in this poem and ended it neatly. That counts lots.

Good read, good write but, even more important, great ride. Write a collection of these and the drinks and your book would be great in winter with lots of snow. (yeah, any other season....but something about reading your imagination's wanderings in winter.....)

Speaking of:

How do you make anti freeze? Answer below.
















Hide her nightgown!

[psychotic pretender]

heehee

and thanks much

guess im agonna stick this 'un into the general forum now

i cant seem to make it do anything else

thanks everyone who commented

[bags123]

Hi PP,
I'm not much of a critic regarding other peoples poetry. I will however comment on the message behind your piece, and say that I agree whole heartedly. We spend too much time aquiring things,..... and not nearly enough time enjoying what has already been given to us. Personally,.... I believe the early Christian movement, and message had as much to do with societal evolution as it did with spiritual development. Furthermore,.... I don't think one is possible on a large scale without the other. Very thoughtful piece PP. Thanks for writing it.

[psychotic pretender]

glad you enjoyed bags

thanks much

[Eric]

psychotic pretender: So you know I liked it the first time around! good write good read!

[heinzs]

Always amazing what wonderful pieces one can find in the "back pages"... lol. Thanks for refreshing this one, Eric.

[Eric]