Wounded In combat

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lieagainstus

Wounded In combat

Post by lieagainstus » Sat Jan 22, 2005 1:14 am

Scream just to suffocate yourself
cut off all ties of humanity
murder the fools who laugh
Burn this palace to the ground
bloody sunrise to set your head into
blanket the snow in blood and pity
been open too long sew it up and leave it

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Post by Pardoe » Tue Apr 05, 2005 5:27 pm

Very dark and original. You have given the reader allot of layers to wade through here. Really nice.

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