You laughed to see
my two feet
cast in clay
then the rain came
and washed your
satisfied smile away
you were amused
by my
eventual decline
my head in a vise
surgical needles
in my spine
you cracked up
when they put me
in a padded room
I danced with
a shovel
made love to
an unyielding broom
what gets me every time
is the way
you show you care
sending sugar kisses
well wishes,
sweet nothings
in the air
you cried me a river
until the banks
overflowed
you went all nuclear
your atom heart
how it glowed
you simpered
and you stammered
and lost control
I guess
easy living has
taken its toll
you cracked up
alone in a
padded room
warm regards
from the outer
reaches of gloom.
Cast In Clay
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Re: Cast In Clay
What is the significance of the padded room? It's important enough to appear twice in the poem.
An' it harm none, do what ye will. Blessed Be.
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Re: Cast In Clay
A metaphor for coming to question one's sanity, post-breakup. Exaggerated, perhaps.
I'm not sure I planned it this way. Sometimes the verses follow their own rules.
I'm not sure I planned it this way. Sometimes the verses follow their own rules.
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Re: Cast In Clay
I am rarely in control of where a poem is going. They have a mind of their own (or someone else's altogether). I can see it as a metaphor.
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