Come dance with me

Love poems and poems of romantic interest (not erotica).

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Mellen12
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Come dance with me

Post by Mellen12 » Fri Aug 29, 2008 11:19 am

I will dance with whom I choose
Unlease a song that will never lose
A chaotic mess of words not said
Nightingales call on poetic threads

Stormy nights have come and gone
Must my mind be gone that long?
Pray tell, I thought I heard you say
Passionate nights turn to dismal days

It's been so long and far too short
Some fools like us should never court
Let gravity take this course we choose
Hopefully I'll never be captured by you
"A woman with the courage to step out into the unknown, risking temporary loneliness for a shot at lasting joy, is more than a "single." She's singular. Instead of defining herself by what she lacks - a relationship with a man - she defines herself by what she has: a relationship with God." ~from Dawn Eden's 'The Thrill of the Chaste'
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Re: Come dance with me

Post by Moushka » Sun Aug 31, 2008 1:32 am

Almost perfect rhyme and rhythm........oh so cool......... :thumbsup: :cool: :mrgreen:
Stuck on Number 2. Learning to begin.
1.Believe 2.Belong 3.Become
1.Awareness 2.Acceptance 3.Action
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Re: Come dance with me

Post by Mellen12 » Sun Aug 31, 2008 9:47 pm

Thank you Moushka!
Some advice please, what do you think I should change?
Thanks again :grin:
"A woman with the courage to step out into the unknown, risking temporary loneliness for a shot at lasting joy, is more than a "single." She's singular. Instead of defining herself by what she lacks - a relationship with a man - she defines herself by what she has: a relationship with God." ~from Dawn Eden's 'The Thrill of the Chaste'
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Re: Come dance with me

Post by jenial » Thu Sep 11, 2008 5:06 am

has a nice flow to it...keep it up
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Re: Come dance with me

Post by TeenPoet » Tue Sep 23, 2008 9:38 am

Beautiful.

I loved it, keep up the good work!

:thewave:
"Love is as strong as death. Why be capable of feelings if we're not to have them? Why long for things if they're not meant to be ours?" -Tristan & Isolde

"Reality Is A Funny Thing. There Are No Defenses Against It Except Madness."-Listen To The Silence By David W. Elliot

No matter how many times you've felt it, love will always remain infinite and mysterious. Like God, love runs ahead of us, and just when we think we've caught up, it slips farther away....
-Deepak Chopra
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Re: Come dance with me

Post by jeannerené » Tue Sep 23, 2008 8:37 pm

There a bit of fun and mischief expressed here.

Love playing a little game ... I like it!

.j.
... and his words purge up and outward,
expelled and onward through desert dust swallowed,
sands he says that gorge on simple sensibilities.
And, now he spits fragments, grit, extended vowels and elongated syllables
over cracked lips. Their sounds fall
piling round his boots… ~ jeannerené

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~breathe~


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Re: Come dance with me

Post by Duchess » Sat Sep 27, 2008 11:12 pm

i :hearts: it. Nice work :hearts:
"Our minds create our realities based on our perceptions and how we view our world..." "In crazy mans world, everyone else is insane and he is the only sane one"
Both said by My Georgia Muse

I miss my baby...R.I.P Chyna
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Re: Come dance with me

Post by Mellen12 » Tue Oct 07, 2008 5:33 pm

Thanks everyone :wink:
"A woman with the courage to step out into the unknown, risking temporary loneliness for a shot at lasting joy, is more than a "single." She's singular. Instead of defining herself by what she lacks - a relationship with a man - she defines herself by what she has: a relationship with God." ~from Dawn Eden's 'The Thrill of the Chaste'
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