**Better When Broken**

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David Bradsher
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**Better When Broken**

Post by David Bradsher » Tue Feb 06, 2007 9:13 am

His muse was once enchanting, and her inspiration glowed,
So mystically enlightened that his metered verses flowed
Without the fractious ranting that he once depended on
When he, disturbed or frightened, would become an easy pawn

For one who’d hurt a writer just to gauge how he’d avenge
A wrong with a reaction (in a pen-and-paper binge).
He sensed the flame inside her, and it warmed him into winter,
Achieving satisfaction in the poems that he sent her.

But early-February brought a hard, symbolic sleet
That coldly coincided with a feeling of defeat,
Which haunted him, contrary to the comfort he enjoyed,
And left him, unrequited, in that same familiar void.

She’s gone, but what’s remaining is an educated fool
Who won’t forget, and uses, the rejection as his fuel
To keep him from complaining of his lot in life because
He’s busy when he loses, and he’s better when he does.

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Nominated for Poem of the Week on 2/21/07

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Post by Ven » Tue Feb 06, 2007 9:18 am

:bow: again ! Absolutley love it :thumbsup:

Do I recall you mentioning something about working on a book ?
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Post by bags123 » Tue Feb 06, 2007 9:42 am

Superior work. Always enjoy reading one of yours.
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Post by Maesto » Tue Feb 06, 2007 4:57 pm

:bow: :bow: :bow: :bow: :bow: :bow: :bow: :mrgreen: :mrgreen: :mrgreen: very nice, I always enjoy your work
"Tis better to love poetry than to hate it, for it will always catch up with thee"

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Thank you all

Post by David Bradsher » Tue Feb 06, 2007 7:37 pm

I really appreciate the kind comments.

Ven, I have a contract for a 200 page book, so I should be able to fit quite a few poems in there. The title is "Pieces of the Fortress", and I hope to have it out by Fall. Thanks for asking.

David

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Post by fstasu53 » Wed Feb 07, 2007 6:54 am

I love this, such a good read. Words full of feelings that the reader can feel, my kind of poem that's a pleasure to read.

Bobbi

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Post by bags123 » Wed Feb 07, 2007 1:12 pm

Just wondering. You wouldn't happen to be a communist would you? :shrug:
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Post by heinzs » Wed Feb 07, 2007 1:19 pm

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Post by David Bradsher » Tue Feb 20, 2007 11:52 am

LOL, my friend. No, better dead than red, and all that stuff. I believe in better read than dead. :)

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Post by nacona » Tue Feb 20, 2007 2:27 pm

David,

Great job with this, I enjoyed the read. I am sorry that I did not get to read this poem before now, thank you for sharing!

Cheers!
Shawn Nacona
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Post by heinzs » Thu Mar 06, 2008 11:35 pm

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