**Don't cry** Poem of the Week, 10/31/2004

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**Don't cry** Poem of the Week, 10/31/2004

Post by Storyteller » Tue Oct 26, 2004 8:53 am

Winner: Poem of the Week: Oct 31, 2004
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Don't Cry

A tear forms,
somewhere between leaving and a park bench
overlooking a midnight ocean and yesterdays farewell.
It rolls down, candle lit,
between pages of poetry sprawled across your gentle cheek
and navigates through memories
and pauses at streaks
to take note.

It rolls down, waterslide,
gliding past forgotten smiles,
wading around for a dimples sign
and rests heavily upon your lip
(where we last kissed)

The teardrop sits, quivering,
awaiting it's long leap.
Salting up a tale told tongue
remembering your blue eyes.

And as it falls, all is forgot.
No more streams to form
or waterslides.
It's lost it's grip to your soft skin.
It's gone...It's left...It's lonely too.

And as it splashes onto a page,
resting on a cluttered desk,
it lies...
looking up it says
don't cry.

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Nominated for Poem of the Week on 10/28/2004

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Re: Don't cry

Post by Juvenile » Tue Oct 26, 2004 2:05 pm

:cheers:

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Post by Storyteller » Thu Oct 28, 2004 8:40 am

:cheers:

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Post by Gillian » Thu Oct 28, 2004 9:13 am

Just simply beautiful. ...sigh....

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Post by buttterflies » Thu Oct 28, 2004 4:12 pm

i read the last stanza...and felt an intense silence around me... a beautiful, lonely silence... this is amazing, ST...!!! the whole entire write is outstanding.
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Post by the quiet poet » Thu Oct 28, 2004 4:26 pm

:cool: Excellent work.

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Post by Candy_Cane » Thu Oct 28, 2004 10:05 pm

Wow .. this is so passionate Story.. and the last line was a blast too... very touching...

It sure deserves the nomination..

Good luck and keep up the good work.. :cheers:

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Post by Friend_forever » Sun Oct 31, 2004 8:26 pm

A very beautiful write...

Deserves the award totally... Congrats!!
And as I watch you in this light
I never realized your eyes were full of
So many colors.
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Post by Storyteller » Thu Nov 04, 2004 4:47 pm

Thank you very much, and I'm sorry my reply is so late.

I wasn't even planning on posting "Don't Cry". It was the first day of a fourteen day trip. My girlfriend emailed me telling me she was crying, so I wrote it for her to cheer it up. After I sent the email I thought I might as well post it and see what other people thought. Since I was away, I only had time to check my email, so I didn't now about it until I recieved an email telling me to check my oprivate messages, that's where I discovered I'd won.

Needless to say, my girlfriend loved it, and so it seems do most of you.

My Greatest of Thanks for this unexpected award.

Storyteller

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Post by desired_suicide666 » Fri Nov 26, 2004 11:16 pm

outstanding....totally speechless.... your words are beautifully written.. great job...

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Post by Storyteller » Sun Nov 28, 2004 1:00 pm

why thank you very much...

I've checked your words out...sad but beautiful.

Storyteller,

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Post by heinzs » Sat Nov 26, 2005 9:23 am

:bump:
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Post by Dragonchild » Sat Nov 26, 2005 1:53 pm

glad this got bumped or i would have missed it completely..... amazing write, just amazing

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Post by heinzs » Sat Nov 18, 2006 12:07 pm

:cool:
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Re: **Don't cry** Poem of the Week, 10/31/2004

Post by heinzs » Sat Dec 01, 2007 12:47 pm

:bump:
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