Bones

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kuperian4ever
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Bones

Post by kuperian4ever » Tue Dec 31, 2013 4:32 pm

Bones

The bones of a relationship lost
Lie scattered in the heat
But every now and then
You will find some still have meat.
And when you smell that heated meat
On the bones of that lost love.
You remember how it started
Then was lost in one big shove.
You remember all the good times
How your hearts just seemed to fit
That meat still smells pretty good
The rest just smells like shit


S.P Kuper 12/31/2013.
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Death will be your final victory over life
Rejoice, for victory comes even as you live
Spread your arms and embrace the future

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CamelToe
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Re: Bones

Post by CamelToe » Tue Jun 17, 2014 7:47 pm

I really like this, well written and the way everything comes together works great. Thx for sharing
Deep into that darkness peering, long I stood there wondering, fearing, Doubting, dreaming dreams no mortal ever dared to dream before

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Re: Bones

Post by kimmyjean » Mon Aug 25, 2014 6:18 pm

In agreement with Cameltoe...

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Mortal lovers must not try to remain at the first step; for lasting passion is the dream of a harlot and from it we wake in despair.-C. S. Lewis
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Re: Bones

Post by kuperian4ever » Sat Jan 31, 2015 2:36 pm

Thank you very, very much, Cameltoe and kimmyjean. I appreciate your critiques :thumbsup: :hello:
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Spread your arms and embrace the future

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